On The Way To Greatness
 

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like sharpening a knife, i'm headed to the point of greatness
but decapitation has left my mind to my joints relate-less
to straighten this, i've hit these curves with an iron fist
checking each box as i pass each of the desired list
with wires i twist situations around to best suit what my needs be
i ain't a robin hood, but with force i go around looting the greedy
shooting at the bleeding, yall suckas don't even deserve the life
taste my greatness to be as i begin to serve this knife
to nerves i strike with more than words as weapons
i've hit the scene so hard it's like i've blurred the settings
curse the forgetting, cuz you'll never see success again
i'll never be a ghost after life, cuz i possess the end
suppress the friends, cuz they'll just wind up getting in the way
so hot, they say i match frisco cuz i'm even sweating the bay
i'm betting the day will come, all i see are green lights
and i don't need to picture composure cuz even my scene writes
seen to thing to many times like the game's trying to plant me
success looked small but i carried myself on my back, the way envy
can't see, but i'll still walk my way through mazes
no denial in my steps to success, cuz i don't do phases
i view stages only to get tips on how to perform my act
i've weathered the truth of greatness as i storm the facts
warned attacks, but only so you can see me coming
i march to my own beat so hard i even bleed the drumming
you won't see me running, but i spin cuz i'm on my way to the top
yo big feet could step all over me, but you'll never see the day that i flop
made way through stops, cuz i've trampled these signs
i never let go and hung around long enough to sample the vines
make example by my rhymes, shit i only state the truth
never tardy to the board, cuz i was never late to move
break the route, but there are no kinda forks in the road
i'm bound to burst like i was uncorked to explode
extort the modes, fuck it, i've already paid my dues
you see me fucking the standards up, that's only cuz i laid the rules
never be afraid to prove my worth, these critics have already been defeated
so if you see me coming at you, you better be ready to be unseated

like sharpening a knife, i'm headed to the point of greatness
but decapitation has left my mind to my joints relate-less
to straighten this, i've hit these curves with an iron fist
checking each box as i pass each of the desired list
with wires i twist situations around to best suit what my needs be
i ain't a robin hood, but with force i go around looting the greedy
shooting at the bleeding, yall suckas don't even deserve the life
taste my greatness to be as i begin to serve this knife
to nerves i strike with more than words as weapons
i've hit the scene so hard it's like i've blurred the settings
curse the forgetting, cuz you'll never see success again
i'll never be a ghost after life, cuz i possess the end
suppress the friends, cuz they'll just wind up getting in the way
so hot, they say i match frisco cuz i'm even sweating the bay
i'm betting the day will come, all i see are green lights
and i don't need to picture composure cuz even my scene writes

^^ right there beautiful start...I was about to say HOF material, which it could still possibly be but then I think u kinda fell off after that...and you merely picked up at the end, but I wasn't feelin it after that...

return favour...

yo you keep comen with the illest shyt..yo much respect homegurl...keep doen ya thang...remeba hataz hate and theyll neva love

thx fo da feed i forgot i wrote dis uppin

shooting at the bleeding, yall suckas don't even deserve the life
taste my greatness to be as i begin to serve this knife
to nerves i strike with more than words as weapons
i've hit the scene so hard it's like i've blurred the settings
curse the forgetting, cuz you'll never see success again
i'll never be a ghost after life, cuz i possess the end
suppress the friends, cuz they'll just wind up getting in the way
so hot, they say i match frisco cuz i'm even sweating the bay
i'm betting the day will come, all i see are green lights
and i don't need to picture composure cuz even my scene writes


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Best bit....ma this was hot...i loved this imagery...structure...this hot....9/10....RTF..on my OM called BATTLEFIELD SCARS.....link in sig

yepp anoda gd drop frm u,,, u gt talent girlll...... hot #### holla

p.s .......... drop a reply to dis plz....... return d favour... tnx ~1~

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=195552 <-- clik link

Nice drop girl....Fa reel had some good vocab...imagery...had a good conecpt...n all that...And also you had a good structure n all easy to read...overall: 9.2/10...Keep up tha good work girl....

nicely done. most multis weren't forced, wordplay was good, also. However, some words seemed a little forced, like when you said "unseated" i knew u meant run away, but it just sounds kind of odd, u know? Some lines seemed irrellevant to the rest of the verse, like "made way through stops, cuz i've trampled these signs" < i get what signs you're refferring to when you say 'stops,' but it just seems like it's the kind of line that would have a double-meaning to it. Vocab was good, but it could improve. Overall, it was a very nice drop. Peep mine please and thank you :D