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Drama Queen vs. Ice-D
Battles up Monday - Check In by Wednesday - Drop by Friday - Votes by Sunday No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa. All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum . People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum Topic: Afterlife |
checkin in like a homosexual on viagra blowing a trumpet........
^^ werd to the nonesense..... |
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whether i win or lose dont matter......... i said i wud drop sumthin nobody expected to see......... so here it is........a different kind of approach to a topical battle........... One second of my life, one second when I made the wrong choice And my life is over, my eyes are closed but I don’t hear God’s voice So does it mean I’m going to hell, am I destined to burn in the fire Doesn’t look like I’m going to either, my situation is looking dire I rise up into the air, now I’m a ghost staring down at my body But it’s a good thing, now I get to scare the shit outta somebody Floating above ground, I am a bird surging through the open sky Burst through the fluffed up clouds into a plane as it passes by I got food flyin by itself and the passengers fear ‘n’ panic is showin Invade the plane toilet and *BOO* now there’s a load of shit flowin Slalom through the cries into the cockpit..start flickin all the switches Engines shut down and then even the men are soundin like bitches Plane plummets and people are gaspin..the skies like a blur passin But I turn the engines back on in time and leave the plane laughin Back to the real world to haunt..I’m definitely not a friendly ghost Appear in front of some dude, who freaks and runs into a post Spot some dude just mugged a lady..stole a car so he could flee So I fly by and tap his side window..he looks at me and hits a tree Into a building, some guys giving a speech, I unhook his belt with ease Then he’s stood in front of a crowd with his pants down past his knees Out and down the street, I see a woman, a real picture of perfection Somethings growin inside of me, who knew a ghost cud get an erection Man, I’ve only just started, amazing what ya can do as a ghost I hope this never ends..cuz being a dead spirit I love the most WERD!! |
I will drop on Saturday because I won't be able to come online tomorrow night, things have gotten a little hectic...
I will drop on Saturday without doubt though! |
Afterlife Staring out the window to obscure clustering clouds holding mystery Where wonderful souls find a last home as the end of their life history I slowly comb my hair, my reflection looking back at me in the mirror When suddenly see him standing there as my vision becomes clearer Severely shocked by what my eyes perceived and I quickly run away Such a bewildering array of nature, escaped to the oh so peaceful bay Printed my footsteps into the soil, leaving a trace of my followed path Bashful continuing road to the open sea, scared about death’s wrath . . . But those fears are soothed as the cold water slowly covers my feet Go in a bit deeper yet I remain discrete until I see your image beneath Rapidly turn around to abandon horrid picture of you being this close I refuse to believe in ghosts but cannot deny what just been exposed Wind blowing through my hair, transferring your screams from above Nightmares filled my life after you were gone but nothing I dreamed of . . . Can be compared to this, I feel your frigid unstable breath in my neck A shiver goes down my spine; you left me behind as emotional wreck Seeing you everywhere I look and sensing your presence in every place Longing for a last embrace as I’m constantly confronted with your face Run back to our little cabin where we shared so many nights before Drag my scarred corps back to my bedroom as I stare at the shore . . . When I cannot believe this unbelievable sight and vibe combined As I view another pair of footsteps firmly printed next to mine |
ICE-D- Ha, nice approach man, but your wrong, I've seen people come better than this, with they're humor. Nice imaginary, gave me images in my head. The emotion was average not best nor weak, just elevate on that a little. Your vocab needs to be upp also, it sometimes and also Upps your emotion also, if you word it right. But this was an good piece man, str8 up cause it was funny lol, the best aspect was your imaginary, keep it up bruh.
DQ- Nice imaginary, the emotion was meh not your best from what i've seen from you recent shit but it was ok. The vocab needs to be upp a little. The best aspect from your verse was Imaginary. OVerall=Close battle, good pieces from both, and both lacked emotion. Imaginary i guess i'mma have to vote on, Ice-D nice man, you had great imaginary, but not alot of details, and not alot of emotion (feelings). DQ you had an good verse, you lacked emotion, but you had good imaginary, I vote for you because you had more details in your piece, but also a bit of emotion also. SO my vote goes to DQ. 1 |
word, hmm, tough choice, actually
so im going to break it down to endings......and i was really feeling DQ's ending a little more, because it just left me to think ya know......like whoa, thats cool, and just leaves the whole piece to settle in nicely.....emotion was pure, imagery was what stood out here, and i think thats the most important thing solo, i just think you went for pure entertainment on this one, i liked the way you did this one, but i didn't like your finisher, as much as it was a little funny, and then the last two lines were pretty corny, lol.....but overall, it was an enteraining piece, just feel more thought went into DQ's and it stood out a little more word, props to both, v/DQ |
werd to that
i knew i was gonna lose but at least i entertained everyone |
v- DQ
Out and down the street, I see a woman, a real picture of perfection Somethings growin inside of me, who knew a ghost cud get an erection ^^ I loved that bar. Lmao, I laughed out loud for real. Aight, Solo, I think your approach was different, and could have been a lot better if you had details. DQ- Nice verse. Your ending was very nice and not something I expected. Flow was good and so was your imagery. Overall seems like your verse was more in depth. |
Ice D....you had a good verse...good flow...nice message but it jus didn't hold my attention seemed to be missing something....u were a lil weak on the emotion stand point...an ya imagery coulda been somewhat stronger but overall good drop
DQ....good flow, nice message....what stood out was ya imagery...ya piece developed well...vocab was good....coulda used some more multies but jus nitpicking...overall good piece. Vote DQ....persoanlly jus found hers more intertaining...but much respect to ice |
Dq Wins .
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