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.Pandoras Plasma Screen. (Ft. The Czar) HOF!
.Pandoras Plasma Screen.
• • • • • Pandoras Box Now Plays The Real World & Desperate Housewives The War In Iraq & Other Crisis's Are Just Subtle Commercials Do Not Adjust Ur Screens Black & White Televisions Are Not In Color But I Cry Dirty Tears After Every Episode Just To Make Sure For Every Day We Tan In Light Of Pandoras Box & Glow Green. When Did The Fashion Statements Hold More Weight Then The News For Our Wrists Carry Scars & Messages To These Pair Of Eyes Along With The Tears & Swastika Etched On The Face Of This World All Covered Up By The Masks Of Our Own Hands & Were Not A KKK? For The Exchange Of Blood For Oil Is Evident In Our Now Gas Prices. The Right Wing & Left. An Overbearing Concience Among Our Sholders As We Rely On The Angels Of Miracles & Read The New Books Of Revelations Modeled Covers Personifying Pandoras Image With A Medusa Visage As Our Hearts Sink Deep Within Our Stomachs & Wear Our Soul On Our Sleeves As We Punch Our Time Out In This World & End It With The Knives In Our Backs. . . . . Those who have it all want to live the surreal life of an American Idiot. With 24 hours to live. Are you a contender or a victim of a crime scene investigation? See it now, Horizon's Journal and soul of the Devil's next apprentice, Fired from the gazing light that shines in the havens of Deus ex Machina. Be the last action hero. Unlock the Pandora's Box for big brother. Rage against the humans like Zach de la Rocha from Rome to Jupiter Leave the chips on the couch and unleash the sleeping giant on your shoulder But soldiers play Survivor: The Real Game, while you coldly skip the news, And tune into making the band while the band of brothers continue to stand. Is Pandora the American Idle or that which is already LOST in translation? "Tis a box without hinges, key, or lid, yet golden treasure is hid inside." But where will you swim with many riches newly found? We continuously fight side by side...for the remote which controls an island Or does the island control us? You think you know, but you have no idea. This is the life of an American philosophy. Welcome to our world. ..After a brief commercial break. ------ My Verse Is First .. The Czar Is Second. |
Dope poem, emotional, great vocabulary...the topic,so true, i feel you're opinion about this, society as a whole has sunk low to the point where we feed off tv..so sad, nice overall message, especially for the younger generations, nice piece,keep dropping as i look forward to reading more from you.1
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Damn...dope ass piece...excellent content and message. This is probably one of the best pieces I've read...Very enjoyable.
Overall...9.5/10 RTF on my poem in tha link...please |
definatinlyt hall of fame material buddy....
nice read.i love the fact on how realistic this poem is. and how it relates to our country and communitys. the vocabulary was nice.and your imagery were very vivid. tyhe emotion in this peace comes from the heart and mind. very intelligent piece....nice |
very very deep. i like the way you played this...its like poker. you won the HAND. very nice imagery GOD man this was nice i cant explain enuff how deep this goes. You have touched mostly the main espects in our life today. very nice.
fav part. Quote:
^^^the nicest lines, you really explained everything in just this little verse. keep your head up. |
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this was dope here sun good imagery and emotion only thing i have aganist it is it jumped around a lil too much dont worry bout stucture try to be a lil more descritive on poetic pieces sun.still this was a nice read true shit too like how you described a t.v sun real real shit real nice.............
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Thanks CALI ..
Number 1 Piece Of May .. Woot!! |
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