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Keep Your Homies Close...
Dont hate on the Hyphens, its for those who dont know how to read the multis...overall its just to enhance it... i guess...whatever...just read it hoecakes.. I Remember Them Days When We Was Out There Rippin'-Tha-Stage Flippin'-Tha-Page, Didnt Have To Worry 'Bout Them Clips-&-Tha-Gauge.. Not That We Was Some Chickens-Or-Gays, Just That Life-Was-Nice Despite-Tha-Fights, We Always Sticked Together Like White-On-Rice.. We Loved Tha Sound-Of-Rap, Loved To Battle & Pound-'Em-Cats We Found-Our-Act, Everytime We'd Hit It Up & Lay Down-A-Track.. Shit, We Was Clowns-In-Fact.. Yeah, We Was Always Hittin'-On-Girls Licked Their Titts-Till-They-Curl, & Neva Gave A Shit-About-Tha-World.. At Tha Time We Had A Whole-Clique, Then There Came Some Bull-Shit That Later Led To Us Beefin' Wit Each Other & Blastin'Em Full-Clips.. i Neva Wanted To Pull-Shit, That'll Leave Us Dead-In-Tha-Street i Was Fed-Wit-Tha-Beef, Tired Of Us Blastin' Tha Lead-&-Tha-Heat.. Fuck What Ya Mentioned-To-Me, Still.. Hate Was Like Twirled-Thunder At Times i Wanted To Squash Tha Beef, & Use It To Save World-Hunger.. Sometimes Me & My Girl-Wonder, What If We Was Still Homies-At-Best?! And Theire Was No More Forties-&-Vests, & This Beef Was Just Only-A-Test..? To See How Strong Our Friendship Was, But Nah Man, Its Real-G And Everyday It Kills-Me To See Us Fill Up Wit Such Hateful Feelings.. Then One Day i Was Playin' Ball, & Outside It Was Just Too-Hot So i Went In For A Drink, & All i Heard Was Tha Sound Of Two-Shots.. A Feud Between Two-Glocks, Ran Outside Quick & Slammed-My-Tray Saw My Boy Leakin' On Tha Curb As Tha Otha NIgga Turned & Ran-Away.. Tha Fear-Crammed-Down & Soon A Cop Rolled From Tha Rear,-Man-Down My Boys Eyes Kept Closin' & He Grabbed My Hand As Tears-Ran-Down.. Hurtin', He Popped-Off-His-Vest, & He Still Had HIs Glock-To-His-Chest Began Gushin' All Over, To Think It Was Only 2 Shots, Tha Block-Was-A-Mess.. Smiled At Me, & Whispered A Few Words From His Last Only-Breath 'We Still Homies, Right? Nuthin'll Separate Us, Not Even Yo Homies-Death'!.. He Closed-His-Eyes, Died Right In Front Of Me, & Then i Frozed-Inside Cops & Ambulance Came Rollin'-By, Cried As i Stared Into My Homies-Eyes.. Anger Rose-Inside, Stared Down To Tha Curb At Where Tha Chrome-Lied No Matter What, i Wanted To Be His Homie Forever, Even If i Took My Own-Life.. As i Held Tha Glock, i Closed My Eyes & My Whole Life Was Flashin'-By Fell On His Body, Clashed-&-Cried ..BUT NO.. i Had To, & i Began To Blast-Inside.. It Was All In One Flash.. One Shot & It Was Quick, So Just Remember-Though Keep Yo' Homies Close To You & Treasure Them Cuz You Might Never-Know!.. |
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where da fukk did u get ya name from...lol
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Thats what i was thinking lol.
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Why yall hatin the name...?...just read and feed...
If ya that curious make a thread about it in LL... |
Yo Diz Wuz Hot, Ahm Really Feelin Da Drop, Dawg, Sumthan Real 2 Read Fo Once, U Bought It Live, Man, Flow Wuz Good, Metaphours Wuz Rite On Point, Da Realness Of Da Peice Gon Have Deez Homiez Shook, Let Me Kno If U Gon Do Lyke And Open Mic Remix 2 Diz Peice, I'd Luv 2 Drop A Verse 2 Diz Concept, Stay Up Bro
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whut????...hatin??? dogg i just ask u where u got ya dumbass name from
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Sorry if i misunderstood ya, didnt mean to start any beef...but um...where i got it from?...Im just creative like that..
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this was deep, i like pieces like this, this was good...good multis, i personally liked the vocab, flow was there, it was just an overall very good piece, i hope i see more from you in the future
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fell off in some bars... basic vocab....
your better then most with multi's but the vocab n having extended lines with just normal 2 syllable rymhes at the end was your downfall.... topic was'nt overly creative.... had no wordplay or metas in the drop, text was basic n straight to the point....... but considering the lack of talent on this board.. maybe its best its not complex.......no hate...7/10 |
feelin this my nig....your rhymin made me feel like i was there, especially when you was spittin about your folks gettin dropped....i give it a 9-10....keep this shit up mayne, this was reelly deep
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Fuck man....i hate that bullshit, its a fucking open mic not something thats published...who the fuck really cares about that bullshit, your hella wack if you do...i dont give a fuck about wordplay in a poem...vocab or whatever...fuck all that, you can critique all that in a battle or something, but shit its a fucking open mic, lighten up nigga..damn...If i had a poem with one meta, a lil bit of vocab, and one of each of the things your looking for in one sentence youd have to give it a ten out of ten by what your saying,, wack ass street pickle... |
Eh... it was decent sorta fell off here and there..
You vocabulary was simplicit...could have been better You had nice multies , ill give you that but you needed some better vocab and wordplay.. Some of your lines looked alittle stretched wasnt feeling that.. Structure was all over the place... Drop had no meta's or any really nice wordplay.. Overall it was pretty much a very simple drop ive seen better from you ... but keep it up |
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you hate people pointing out flaws in your work.. :huh: i put it to you straight, it was aight... im not one to start beef over such a pointless comment such as yours above.. learn how to take criticism in all forms..when you do, you will get better, until then try not to let your emotions make you look like an over zealous 2 year old.. like i said ...NO HATE :thumbup: |
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