...The Drop Of A Lifetime...
 

Yo a keystyle
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Yo a heart is only as good as the body its in,
Life is short to you but to me its a blessing,
A brain is great to have fore all of us use,
Able to think unconsiously--a miricle,
A consience life in a persons head,
Speaking to a man or one with peace,
Death the start of eternal life for those,
A mic a device witch lets us speak our mind.
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The Style Change...
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Yo words are lines connected by points,
able to relieve stress if out in the right joints,
Language communication through native toungs,
i breath Poetry therefore i have deep lungs,
you speak through open mics,
i speak to open minds,
in rhymes,
and seamless lines,
connection through the lime light,
as you read this drop of a lifetime.
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Feed Please.......Thanks for reading!!

This was a decent drop, i felt you could have put more effort into the words and what you were trying to convey emotionally. Although, you definatley had the right idea with this concept, i don;t think it was your drop of a lifetime. I thought the first keystyle was more original, because the words seemed to flow out more. Keep dropping and i hope that what i said made sense,as i was not trying to be offensive,but helpful..1