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Inbetween the Cracks...
came out with a diff style in this one, kinda anyways....focused alot on imaginative aspects....anyways, hope you beaches like it. twas suppose to be a battle, but other dude no-showed, aighty. drop links or whatever, i'll return favors, word.
enjoy. ______________________________________ Inbetween the Cracks
_________________________________________beneath the surface, beyond what your eyes can see....there's so much more lets go. welcome to a realm where existence is intended to bend where pretends the norm, subsistent excitement, never knowing an end in this land im king, soaring across the world on mystic lizards blowing fiery smoke rings, or unfurling cataclysmic blizzards fly along outlaws, storming across the heavens on explosive horses shooting stars, creating vibrant streaks in the sky like corrosive forces and the night sky rains down, splashing ripples in a crystal blue ocean moonlight sparkling off mermaid's colorful scales as they continue in motion i can see crossbones in the distance, roaring cannons are sounds of peril waters littered with empty rum bottles and gunpowder barrels this is pirate territory, shouldnt interfere when their gettin drunk'n pleasured but far too overwhelming to pass up a shot at some sunken treasure sneak on board, just for a peek or more, maybe swipe me some riches but i open the captains door only to be transported to a tower of witches hocus pocus, 10 cackling devils casting magic spells in all directions but two snaps of my fingers and the right words give me a wall of protection fireballs to the right, lightning to left, within moments they've fallen so i walk over to the center of the room and take a plunge into the cauldron i emerge from a lush jungle, at some ruins of some ancient, rare shrines see some depictions on a large slab, curious, so i tare away the vines "danger: do not push...a terrible threat to the world if ever released" without thinking i press the switch, and emerges an enormous beast glowing yellow eyes, sinister smile reflects of a full set of razor sharp saws i turn and run but can't escape the grasp of the beast's massive claws thrown 50 feet into the air, looking down i stare stragiht into the creature's soul ready myself, "here goes nothing"...down to the belly of the beast, swallowed whole i land in a muddy crater, its an odd shape and i know more than looks fit 3 large impressions stick out, and realize im standing in a dinosaur footprint i turn around to hear a massive rumbling, a frightening roar is next quickly, i decide to run...and out of the bush appears a tyrannosaurus rex the chase is long....and the gigantic reptile closes in, teeth ready to strike when we approach a cliff, a whisper releases wings from my back, i jump and take flight i glide majestically, hovering over this secret, magical world i touchdown softly near a glistening lake and remain there with a beautiful girl --------------------------------------------------------- inbetween the cracks, shelters a world yet discovered imagination flourishes a universe unknown by any other escape to place so pure and great, its untouched by hate fate is in your own hands, its anything you dream to create fantasy becomes reality, locate anything you're hopin' to find here, anything is possible, just as long as you open your mind DQ's latest piece - you other hoes should check this one too :) |
bump this, no one leaves feed anymore
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over 10 views already?
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Yeah yo, this will be edited and feed will be left... but im thinkin if thye see i left feed maybe they'll be like "yeha yo! im gonna leave feed too!"
Aight aight, heres my feed... i honestly loved that, espcially with the multis, that adds alot of cool points on my scale, cause its easy to tell a story ryhming 1 sylable, nah mean? anyway, very good imagery on that, that t-res line was dopeness, in fact the whole thing basically owned every OM in the first page, shouldn't be slept on... I really loved it, reminds me of ***** N *** a little... |
^Same avy?...But yeah this was a very good drop..
It had very nice , and very strong imagery.. really Creative words that grabbed the readers attention.. you had nice wordplay pretty good vocab , nice structure and no line stretched more then the other , sometimes it fell off.. Flow was good , Overall this was a nother nice drop from you Drakel. Keep it up , |
word...........
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HOuston.................we have a probleM.
sHIT i'MMA HAVE to come hard in our battle FUCK!, lol. |
ah!!!! DOPE!!!!
werd... 9/10 drakel > RV |
lmlo @ artitica, yeah, come dope fo-sho, cause i will too :)
lmlo! @ EB, i'll hit up your OM fo-sho |
werd cuz zig zags open mic is dope (lmao @ me only having like 6 lines in it)
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word.................
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OSB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! get back in here and edit some feed!!!!
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This was a dope peice...so deserves good feed..
This was deep and the vocab was top notch throughout the whole peice, every bar flowed well off the last one and the structure was good throughout.... especially at the end when you made the bars smaller... that just summed up a dope peace. and i actually read it all!! good shit fam, 9/10 if you can, hit up a battle in ma sig :thumbup: |
i forgot to put 9.5/10
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