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::..With Words, I'm Sick...::
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=192362
Im Invisible But My Rhymes Visible..What Bed?...Nobody Sleeps On Them Like Fiends...Each Eye Wantin, To 'SEE-DEATH'...Like Da 'SITES-HAUNTED'! Slit Skin...Then Flaunt Da Flesh, You 'FAKE-AIR'......I'll 'PAWN YA BREATH'! Don't Harm Da Best, Son I Could 'MUTE-ADAM'...Like A 'PAUSE ON NECKS'! Somethin About My Swagger's ill.........Crew Name Lit Up Like Santas Here On Scale Cant Outweigh My Skill, 'Act Like Throats'....I'll DIRECT U PILLS! Earthquake Lips...Damn I Outshake People With PARKINSONS...Often Sin NEWS Flash, U Could BROADCAST Ya Lines......Da Ratios "10-10" I'll WIN! Whoeva Tests Me Dies Painfully....I'm Greatful Tho....U Not AWAKE 2 See! Fake Thugs..U A Disgrace 2 Gs!, Formally Funny...Son I 'TICKLE-FANCIES'! Step 2 Ack, Ya Deaths Brutal Not Placid......BURN CLITS Wit Vinereal Acid! No Shoes..Who Runnin Passed His, Authentic Spits...Ya Tongue Is Plastic! Call Me Unfair? Its Nothin 2 'RIP YA AUNTIES'.....Than 'TEAR YA COUSINS'! Laugh At My Rhymes, Lol Ain Dat Somethin?...So Talk & Ya Blood'll Drip On Paper Towels In Da Woods....Like BOUNTY-HUNTIN! Duck Me Fucka Y You Stuntin?....Bury Brains...Wit Ya Thoughts Still Alive Nobody Fuckin Wit Me, Yall 'NAILED-YOUNG' Like PRESS-ON PEDOPHILES! FINISHER...SWITCH UP... I TREAD ON YA MISSION Yall Shook And Start PISSIN WHEN... I Get obnoxious & My "Scripts" Concoct Into A RARE PERDICTIONING Like Chess, Da King Move Rooks 2 Change Positionin My GLARE SUBMISSION MEN Showin Ya "Punches Weak" Like Boxers Who SPARE CONDITIONING!!! Lyrics Is Pure But Crazy, When My SPRAYS LASHES I DISPLAY FACETS While Yall Just ACT-CHAMP Like Will Smith When He PLAYED CASSIUS Too EZ... (1) 10-10 Wins Is A News Station (2) Adams Apple Is On Ya Neck...*Dudes* (3) Bounty = A Paper Towel Brand....Woods Is Where Ppl Hunt (Get It?) (4) Will Smith Played Cassius Clay In Da Movie ALI |
Da Flow Waz Hot, Man, Sick Rhymez & Mettas, Diz Drop Iz Flawless, Scrrream At'cha Boi Bout A Collaberation Man ! PZ
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aiight this was kewl, but ya flow could be better though...maybe it's cuz i'm used to audio or reading things that can really be rapped out loud..your battles are better...seems like you put more into those than you do to your OM's...think of everything as a competition and it'll be as close to 100% as you can be :thumbup:
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good line, never heard that before oh, you structure is kinda off, to end lines before the rhyme in the bar actually comes in..make sure that where you end the line and hit "enter" to start the next line, is where the rhyming word is at, cuz it confuses people a lot when you don't...keep it up babe ;)... |
as usual your structure was real good, vocab was alright and i can't deny that you come creative with each drop....try to expand the topics you choose.....and things will be real good......
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Aeyo Uppin This Open Mic Man This Shit Aint Garbage....Stop Bein Lazy Niggaz $cream At This Shit
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Damn.....................FUCK YALL!!
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