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What animal might I be?
Tree Limbs Sway Green & Gray as I Watch my Pray Twice Past Tall Grass Almost Conceals the Figurative Wheels of Life’s Drag Slipped but not Snagged I Tend to Wait for Just the Right Pause I Ignore the Flaws Entangled in Natures Wind Breeze, I Sneeze as I Once Again Dwell on Plots of Tangled Thoughts & Hunger Engraved Within me Since Heaven Cast me Out on Chords of Thunder On the Prowl, I Secretly Sneak my Way Forward Toward Horror Not for me of Course, but This Being Awaiting my Gentle Torture Entranced in Death's Dance I Write the Sequence as the Music Plays So I confuse its Ways as the Illusive Plague Prepares to Invade So Unaware and Unafraid as I Strive to Hide my Need to Strike The Toon Plays on so I Finish my Solo Parade and Strive to Bite Like Railroad Spikes I Pearce Flesh Wrapped on Chest Bone Cavity Almost Savagely I Prolong this Blissful Tragedy I Chose to Indulge I Smile as Eyes Flutter Innocence Away as she Begins to Convulse Pretend to Engulf Acceptance an' Answer Questions .. Not for me.. So I Slither back Beneath the Green & Gray Canopy that Feeds me. Link |
if your asking what kind of animal you are portraying than I'd say a snake. Nice drop. I don't know if you wanted this to mean something but t was a very good drop. Too bad I knew it.... :D
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Thanks for the feed, Haha.
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Uppin the piece.
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Stop Sleepin fucks. Uppin.
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Very Nice Fams...
Only Thing To Be Carefull About Is Your Content... Like The First Line What Kinda Iffy... Looked Like You Just Wanted A Nice Flow... Wich Was Accomplished But The Content Was Sort Of A Stretch... But Very Nice Imagery And Metaphorical Speach... Very Nice, Glad Have You With Us Over On C.S. Fams... Stay Up And Keep Writing... .One. |
Uppin the piece
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Uppin the piece
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nice shit...rhymes were pretty good the flow was good the content was something new it was weird but it was good...id go with ur a lizard...very creative piece here...
please return the favor in my open mic link in my sig |
id say this was a great drop
great use of vocab, portrayed a vivid story, and effective multies which gave it nice flow and a good read; and the vocab you used really brought out the story, good choice of descriptive words, which really painted a vile picture of this creature, nah sayin? and the emotion was pretty good too....if i may say so....haha....overall, great drop, yeah, some lines did seem a little fillerish, but oh well, still fit the context and worked out to be a good one rtf on the one in my sig :), keep up |
Thanks for the feed you two, I checked out your drops.
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very nice drop mayne, excellent vocab......nice structure good word play....nice rhyme complextion multi's nothen to bragg about.....u have good imagery and very very nice description of wut u are trying to describe........8/10........RTF...on my mike jackson diss....thanks
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PREP can i buy you....5 million
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