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OneStepBeyond (0-0) vs. MC IgGy (2-1)
Battles up Monday - Check In by Wednesday - Drop by Friday - Votes by Sunday
No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa. All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. If vote threads aren't in your poetry battle thread by sunday you will suffer a loss by Disqualification. Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. If you dont ask for an extention, and drop whenever you feel like it you will be Disqualified. Do not abuse extentions, they are not to be used if you're just too lazy to drop within the confines of the circumstances. Leave reasonable explanation for your absense. If the League notices you are a slacker due to this nature you will be banned for being out-right slothfully callous. Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum . People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum Don't ho-show because you will be banned if you do it twice. We can understand you cannot drop due to certain circumstances but if this happens a second time, you're banned from the league for 2 weeks. If you signed up for both leagues and you no-show in one league twice, you will be banned in both leagues! Try to limit the freeposts, we will have a chat/beef thread for that. Also give fully explained votes, if not your votes won't count! Your Topic: Living in a glass house |
checking in this shit
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checkitty checker board steam boat taco shell
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Extension granted till Sunday due to exams
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...Breathing deep... Fragile thoughts as it seems to me... ...That my mind state could break with a shake so easily... Sun rays gleaming and beaming from nearly every direction, Delicate walls... Incapable of providing any protection, Structures disvisble, nothing invisible, everythings seen, Walls reflect past experiences... all the memories gleam, Each room's walls a canvas... the beauty of ocean shores, Solving answers... Mind free having the coast absorbed, Each bang on the glass portrays the lucious statements, Falling in pits thinking theres glass above the basement, look at as worthless... although its purpose important, A place to drown in sorrow where its all observed and recorded, Sunshine illuminating its surroundings, all in the area, Though the feeling of insecurity is causing hysteria, Paranoia cause the reflections from movement, imagination? Or real causing agitation keeping me from relaxation, Procrastination from moving away... from this glass formation, No admiration towards this place far from new found salvation, So fragile, can't release frustration and ryhme about it, Wanting to escape... yet I'm still unable to find an outlet.. Meh... wrote it in like 15 minutes... didn't wanna no-show |
did this in like 5 minutes
didnt want to have another no show, but i completely forgot bout dis I wake up each morning and see the same picture my own eyes looking at me, examing the texture providing a figure of over 6 feet tall shoulders broad, as i touch the wall it is made up of a substance which is opaque my reflection shines back at me, clearly, not vague the glass serves as a protection from all harmful objects be it the sun, guns, or unloyal subjects my facial expression changes from joy to anger when i realize that my life is in danger i punch through the glass wall and end up outside the sun shines in my eyes and i rise that dream took me by surprise. |
So fragile, can't release frustration and ryhme about it,
Wanting to escape... yet I'm still unable to find an outlet.. That was tight Ok One def got this, better imagery, flow was smooth fru out Each bang on the glass portrays the lucious statements, Falling in pits thinking theres glass above the basement With tight lines like those Where as iggy was on some basic shit in comparisent the sun shines in my eyes and i rise that dream took me by surprise. flow was tight but i wasnt feeling it u know it seemed too simple Also one's was more enjoyable to read thats why vote - one |
OneStepBeyond: for a quickie, I enjoyed reading this piece: you had excellent imagery, I could really picture everything you were saying so that was an extremly strong aspect of this piece. Together with imagery, you managed to combine good level of emotion: raw and pure, feelings and thoughts of person were nicely portrayed. Flow was good, had similar sound expressions, some multis in there...all things that improve your flow. Concept might not be most original one but it was a pleasant read nonetheless.
MC IgGY: you said it yourself you did it in 5 mins and it shows because I have seen far better from you but it's nice you didn't wanna no-show. Your lil drop wasn't too bad actually, had nice emotion and some good imagery, flow was okay and structure was decent. If you elaborated it a little bit, this might have been a close call but now it's sorta one-sided of course. My vote goes to OneStepBeyond |
Onestepbeyond-
Not a strong concept 2 ur peice, very basic actually...vocab wuz off, flow wuz good i'll give u dat, creativity culd ov been alot better, little 2 no emotion in it, imagination wuz really good, datz wat gave u diz battle 4 real, diz iz certainly not a ''solid peice'' but ur imagination iz sum ov da best i seen in a topic, u lacked good strong vocab, u lacked complex writing scheme so ur lucky dat mc iggys peice wuz weak.....u get da win easily tho, good job. MC Iggy- Not feeling ur topic at all, far 2 basic, vocab wuz elementary, there wuz lil 2 no imagery in ur peice, i juz wuznt feeling anythin at all about ur topic, it iz evident dat it took u 5 minutes, bcuz 2 be honest....it wuz far 2 basic & it looks more like a bunch ov words jumbeld 2gether than complex topical writing. vote=one step beyond |
i'll vote on the other battles when i get home from school
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OneStepBeyond - You had great imagery, which is good since you wrote it in 15 minutes. Emotion was just enough to take that category away from Iggy. Your vocabulary was nice, simple yet complicated you didn't overload your verse with intricate words which alot of people do when the ydon't have alot of time. But considering the time strain, you did quite good.
Mc IgGY - Well, your piece was very short so that set you back. Still, it was quite a powerful piece due to your emotion and the way you described actions. Yet you didn't have alot of vocabulary in your verse. Imagery was decent also, I could picture it all. But my overall vote goes to... OneStepBeyond. |
Closed, OneStepBeyond wins
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