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H-N-I-C (2-0) vs. {Propain} (0-0)
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No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa. All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. If vote threads aren't in your poetry battle thread by sunday you will suffer a loss by Disqualification. Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. If you dont ask for an extention, and drop whenever you feel like it you will be Disqualified. Do not abuse extentions, they are not to be used if you're just too lazy to drop within the confines of the circumstances. Leave reasonable explanation for your absense. If the League notices you are a slacker due to this nature you will be banned for being out-right slothfully callous. Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum . People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum Don't ho-show because you will be banned if you do it twice. We can understand you cannot drop due to certain circumstances but if this happens a second time, you're banned from the league for 2 weeks. If you signed up for both leagues and you no-show in one league twice, you will be banned in both leagues! Try to limit the freeposts, we will have a chat/beef thread for that. Also give fully explained votes, if not your votes won't count! Your Topic: Floating Words |
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Floating Words
Im Holding Shots in the flow with Floating Thoughts
Then a Choking Stop as my mind Slowly Drops . . . . Words Multiply and thoughts Fortify through Lanes In My Brain They call me Propain cuz I emmitt Flames From My Name Defining words like dictionaries, putting websters Fame Out For Shame And I keep them floating like continuous Chains Out Of Rain Born from the family tree of artists, I Smile At My Roots And can up floating words just like Alphabet Soup . . . . Shedding light on flows like when you watch and See Oceans Expressing my movement on the internet, Im dropping E-Motions Still fighting to get to the top of hills that Be Steap Words floating in my mind as Im in a Deep Sleep Lets just say Im 'currently' 'spitting' flames as Im Burning Verbs My content stays above water, you just come Slurring Words . . . . I speak of wisdom and sorrow cuz my words Mostly Cry Picking up the pieces to the puzzle that most Closely Lie Words Slowly Die, scolded in the heat of steaming liquid with Pain I Brought Its like derailing intelligent passengers, I lost my Train Of Thought |
Every night she prays to God in the most sincerest of fashions Down on her knees with both hands clinched with passion A most unselfish act, for she's not prayin for herself She's called upon the Lord askin to keep her son in good health He's addicted to drugs from crack, to heroin and dope Yet she continues to pray...because HOPE FLOATS . Across town somewhere . In a room at his girl's house he sits in a chair Sitting limp and lifeless...and in his eyes...a blank stare Belt choking his bicep as his veins gasp for air A Drug-filled needle penetrates his flesh leaving him impaired Drugs flow thru his blood as he reaches his high Thinkin of all his problems got em' wishin he'd die Only a single door down, his girlfriend is cryin a river A cold wind blows thru the room causin her body to shiver An eerie feeling fills the air as she dries her last tear Walks one door down and realizes her biggest fear John lay pulsating on the ground without an ounce of control His eyes are glazing over as his body goes cold The ambulance rushes him to emergency as hail pelts the windshield About 23 degrees outside if you factor in the wind chill That's not good for John's condition, his blood flow is movin slow Heart moniter flatlinin while his girls yellin don't go . Back Across Town . "In Jesus' name we pray...and for our sake amen" She got in bed, rolled back the covers...and then . . At that exact moment air careened thru John's throat He came back alive...Revitalized..cuz..HOPE FLOATS |
ok this was a good topical but hnic had a little more thought into his work dont get me wrong both did their thing hnic just brung more creativity more content and the words and how he described it just brought more of a picture in my mind.
and this line was the best i liked from him "At that exact moment air careened thru John's throat He came back alive...Revitalized..cuz..HOPE FLOATS" so ican tell what he's thinkin and what he ahs in his mind both did a great job but my vote goes to hnic |
I aint counting that shit. That isnt explained enough and this kid has been cockriding against me lately. 0-0
Sorry for the freepost |
Propain- your drop lacked depth and emotion....i felt that you concentrated to much on gettin the vocab right....which meant that it became a bit boring mid-way.....
H-N-I-C- your drop was filled with emotion and i really felt the creativity of your verse....you told the story well and it had depth and meaning to it....... my vote- H-N-I-C |
Vote - Propain
Basicall its like this Flow - Pro Imagery - Pro Amusement - Both On Topic - Both Creativity - H Best line - Pro : Born from the family tree of artists, I Smile At My Roots And can up floating words just like Alphabet Soup - Dope keeping it real Vote - Propain |
Well, Pro...I don't really have a problem if u disagree with votes, but you prolyt gotta talk to a mod to get a vote disqualified...
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Propain- Man You verse was good it just flowed. I didnt really feel that much emotion in the post. You had some nice lines N my favorite was da last too on the train of thought.You dont need to elevate you just gotta put more emotion into it. I just wasnt feelin the emotion the way HNIC had it.
H-N-I-C: Yo man you had a nice verse. Everything was on point. Concept,story, emotion, flow..........everything went well together. Every line i was feelin aint nuffin threw me off. While i was readin it it was like i was actully livin it. Propain- 7/10 H-N-I-C- 9/10 Nice drops to both people. Propain just work on emotion N H-N-I-C just keep doin ya thang |
WOW at yall voting for H-N-I-C on this one
Propain took it in every category IMO His verse had more emotion and feeling to it, which is good enough for the win right there alone, and I feel that he used better vocab or atleast did a good job with what he used. Imagery was great, and your verse had alot of depth to it. I was no doubt feeling it. H-N-I-C, your verse lacked both vocab and emotion in my eyes. It seemed to plain, and came across to me as boring. Try upping your vocabulary a bit, and being a little more creative. V/ {Propain} |
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I Second That... Propain indeed took all catz... he used better imagery and better emotion and he tried with his vocab and he jus dropped an overall better peice... My Advice to HNIC is to Make sure U Drop Emotion and Use Some Big Words :thumbup: V/Propain Church |
Word...this was a nice topical battle...both came with different ways of presenting the imagery...
Pro-had some real nice lines and some cool wordplay too...like.... Shedding light on flows like when you watch and See Oceans Expressing my movement on the internet, Im dropping E-Motions and.. Lets just say Im 'currently' 'spitting' flames as Im Burning Verbs My content stays above water, you just come Slurring Words ^really liked this but you still came more abstract with presenting the imagery, even though it was more clearer and deeper in a way..... HNIC- I was feelin your verse wit the emotion n everything and it was a cool drop, but you just lacked the vocab and it didnt have as much depth even though it was presented in more of a concrete fashion... had some cool lines.. but V/propain |
Aight, I'ma have to DQ some of these votes for not being fully explained in my opinion, votes that do not count are from Denied Truth and Dizzee Rascal. Propain, if you want the vote from Pen'N'Paper DQ'ed you'll have to show me some evidence cause it was fully explained.
This brings the score too: {Propain}: 2 votes H-N-I-C: 3 votes |
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