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¤ÐÅž¤ 06-07-05 08:27 PM

iLL as a killers grill® vs ¤ÐÅž¤
 
TOPICAL BATTLE....topic:In The Beggining

10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
10 lines cuz people hate readin tonnes of lines :thumbup:

Minimum posts to vote: 750

Check in by: 06-10-05 at 08:27 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Battle closed by Daz's request because iLL as a killers grill® went over 10 line limit

La Cosa Nostra 06-07-05 08:39 PM

10 Lines.......... Thats homo..
I needed atleast 20-30 to do what I was planning on doing..

Well heres to a shit battle..
Enjoy..

¤ÐÅž¤ 06-07-05 08:44 PM

lol......^^you said anything else man..
hmm, i thought that would level out the playing feild a lil more.

La Cosa Nostra 06-07-05 09:41 PM

Yeah no worries man..
Its fine with me, just a little dissapointing..

I'll drop today definatly..
Kinda wanna go smoke weed before I write..
I'm buyin a fiddy after 5pm though so it wont be too long..

System 06-07-05 10:46 PM

¤ÐÅž¤ has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-07-05 10:46 PM.

¤ÐÅž¤ 06-07-05 10:50 PM


In The Beginning

In the beginning there were 9 wonders like an inning…smirking and grinning,
Thou the earth wasn’t winning… man would cause symmetry with its sinning,
Biased upon ways, we were only singular in decay…. Till religion was made,
The decision was laid, the last man standing a-cross, was to pay for our trade,
Now if we stand with science, its facts and belief now traveling in an alliance,
Try to compromise both like mien’s …, but mines(minds)are still in defiance,
Ive tried to walk the line of a purest, but it sure is, tough to see where the turn is,
So I list n listen to where the cure is, but the truth seems to be the furthest …
Thoughts are left doubting… while rights; are at best now joisting for sinning…
Decades of thinking. ”the end”, now move on n make this your new beginning..
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¤ÐÅž¤

System 06-08-05 09:23 PM

iLL as a killers grill® has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-08-05 09:23 PM.

La Cosa Nostra 06-08-05 09:24 PM

In the beginning.

The aftermath slowly smokes my focus..
Who am I?, whered I come from?
& Did humans transform like hokus pokus?
Cause this worlds a circus's packed of un-perfect persons..
You sayin adam and eve? I'm defining our worthless purpose..
See being humans a transition stage, to be on the right page..
From flesh and bones, to being set free from a time cage..
I believe that the light rays, help us understand the immortal..
The next level, we might stay, or only dip our hands in this portal..
Wake up, you been sleeping meat head..
See we aint knee deep in the dead, our real forms aint born yet..

So would it surprise you,
To hear a humans beginning was on their death bed..

Ask yourself..

La Cosa Nostra 06-08-05 09:31 PM

Lol u got text flow like a muh fucka..

Sall good....... Lets get some votes fuckers..

¤ÐÅž¤ 06-08-05 09:46 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by iLL as a killers grill®
Lol u got text flow like a muh fucka..

Sall good....... Lets get some votes fuckers..

nice drop poet, lol @ text flow...werd thanx bro, good luck..

Adam 06-08-05 11:28 PM

This was feedback posted for ¤ÐÅž¤
 
Damn...

Good drop by both of you...Crazy Flows..

King Solo 06-09-05 12:22 AM

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

NoS....

nice quick drop....
structure was nice, the idea for the topic was a good one and you had a nice approach to it.....ya stayed on point throughout, the whole verse flowed well from beginning to end.....i think the strongest points to ya verse were the opener and closer....i liked the 'hocus pocus' line cuz it fitted well and it was kinda funny.....the closer was dope.....especially the very last line, a real good point ya made right there......vocabs in the verse were nice, nuthin real basic except for the end.....nice imagery and feeling in ya verse.......overall 7.5/10


DaZ....

a good drop....
structure was pretty much flawless....lines were stretched but you threw in the multies to help the whole verse flow real well still....stayed on point throughout....nice depiction of the topic to....i especially likeed the 2nd bar...also your closer was tight to, i liked the whole 'move on and make new beginning' that tied in well to finish off the verse...some nice vocabs in there, nuthin real basic and you had some decent wordplay in the verse to......overall 8/10

V/ - Daz

La Cosa Nostra 06-09-05 12:36 AM

Well I'm gonna keep my mouth shut about that one.. :banghead:

Quote:
Originally Posted by ¤ÐÅž¤
nice drop poet, lol @ text flow...werd thanx bro, good luck..


Yo my bad dude, text flow isnt a good thing,.. It means you stretch your lines for structure and makes flow sound real goofy on audio..

Just an obervation..But yeah, goodluck..

Restricted 06-09-05 01:34 AM

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

[CENTER]

Aight Check It..

Daz:

Your Rhyme Scheme In This Seemed A Little Overpowering Which Made The Read Not As Smooth...but Your Vocabulary Was Decent. With Ten Lines You Did Pretty Decent To Get Your Point Across and Put In Some Nice Lines. I Like The Line About Jesus...That Was Nicely Set Up.

Nostradamus:

I Felt Your Piece Fasho, but Your Piece Was More of A Poetical Drop and I Feel That Your Style and Direction With Your Piece Didn't Really Get To Me As A Topical Set Up Like Daz's Did. Your Emotion Through Verbals Was Hot, but Your Imagery and Direction Wasn't There. Just Seemed Like A Person Who Was Confused With His Civialization....If This Was Poetry You Definitly Woulda Won.

Vote = Daz For Better Topical Written Drop.

~R~

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

¤ÐÅž¤ 06-09-05 01:50 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by iLL as a killers grill®
Well I'm gonna keep my mouth shut about that one.. :banghead:



Yo my bad dude, text flow isnt a good thing,.. It means you stretch your lines for structure and makes flow sound real goofy on audio..

Just an obervation..But yeah, goodluck..

werd, i guess the difference is i dont write my text for
audio.. but i guess your right i do stretch text at times...
.
:thumbup:


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