kar0de vs tim dim
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 06-12-05 at 08:58 AM

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tim dim has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-09-05 09:01 AM.

kar0de has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-09-05 09:13 AM.

:) i'll batter n bruise this lame, leave this weak resisting knives.
n have tim meet a sticky endin, like blasting @ busy bee hives.
2 days to drop? man, what the fuck you playing at kid?
i suppose you do have a life , too bad my opener already took it!
see when you set up the battle, your chances of winnin were tossed.
and when i put that smiley face in my verse, was jus a subtle hint you lost.
i'm superior, & this weak is under-me cuz i'm wearin "tim" on my feet.
and yet, the only way youd come close to dope, is if you bit offa me.

if you dont get anything, pm me or dont vote.

This will be simple cause Kar0de is a retard n’ a square
I’ll split his wig and redefine the meaning of partin ya hair
Think I’d lose to you accidentally……….. Please son
if I don’t own you its cause you didn’t come with a refund
The only illness coming from your mouth is gingivitis
This kids more dim than me far from the brightest
Your on 0-0 this is the only time you’ll have a perfect record
Cause I rarely cut short like an extension cord

gingivitis= some dental illness...................................

Voted For: tim dim

Voted For: kar0de

This will be simple cause Kar0de is a retard n’ a square
I’ll split his wig and redefine the meaning of partin ya hair
^^wak
Think I’d lose to you accidentally……….. Please son
if I don’t own you its cause you didn’t come with a refund
^^even worse than the other one
The only illness coming from your mouth is gingivitis
This kids more dim than me far from the brightest
^^^1st line here was ight...but 2nd sucked
Your on 0-0 this is the only time you’ll have a perfect record
Cause I rarely cut short like an extension cord
^^wak

Conclusion-ur punches were too basic.It's all about meta and wordplay.U had neither.

i'll batter n bruise this lame, leave this weak resisting knives.
n have tim meet a sticky endin, like blasting @ busy bee hives.
^^OK
2 days to drop? man, what the fuck you playing at kid?
i suppose you do have a life , too bad my opener already took it!
^^suks
see when you set up the battle, your chances of winnin were tossed.
and when i put that smiley face in my verse, was jus a subtle hint you lost.
^^wak
i'm superior, & this weak is under-me cuz i'm wearin "tim" on my feet.
and yet, the only way youd come close to dope, is if you bit offa me
^^glorified

Concluion-Reason ya got my vote was because ya had some decent punches at the begining.Ur verse went from good to horrible.

Vote-Karode

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This was feedback posted for tim dim
 

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Voted For: tim dim

Alrite i ain't gonna say this was 100% one sided cos that wouldn't be fair to Karode as he made a fair effort.
However his punches didn't hit too hard and his personals were really lacking. Like for example, his line:

see when you set up the battle, your chances of winnin were tossed.
and when i put that smiley face in my verse, was jus a subtle hint you lost.

^^^How can you know that he lost if you put up your verse first.At this point you wouldn't have known what tim dim was gonna drop so this was a bit too overconfident and, in my opinion, came back round and kicked you in the nuts. He kept his vocab too simple, when if used correctly could have been the redeeming feature of his verse.
Tim dim's struture was a lot better, as his lines were more even in terms of syllables n shit.and the humourous punches made the verse more enjoyable to read, and that took away from the fact that there were no personals. Again there was no use of original vocab, but Tim's closing line was the only real weak point in his verse,if anything, due to the fact that even though the first line of the closer was decent, his final line didn't quite measure up to the previous.

My favourite line in this battle was really the opener:

Think I’d lose to you accidentally……….. Please son
if I don’t own you its cause you didn’t come with a refund

I thought that line was undoubtedly the hottest line in this battle.

In my opinion, without a shadow of a doubt, tim dim won this one.
But Karode, you should keep at it.
Peace

This was feedback posted for tim dim
 

gonna leave feed, dont have time to vote...

both have mad punches and wordplay and mad potential, you should hit LL up with a tryout.

^will do I'm looking for a crew ty for the votes..

Voted For: kar0de

GOOD:

Flow - Tie
Structure - Tie
Punchlines - Tie
vocab - Tim Dim
Wordplay - nope
Nameplay - Kar0de

BAD:

forced Rhymes - nope
Forced Multis - nope
Non Sence - tim dim

CREATIVITY

Theme Battle - nope
Creative Punches - tie
creative multi's - nope

PERSONALS:
no personals

OPENING/CLOSING:

Opening: Kar0de
Closing: Kar0de

COMMENT:
Tim dim: good battle, u had good punches, flow, structure but Kar0de had mo hard hittin punches...
didn't left u behind, almost a tie battle... keep up man

V/ Kar0de

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