keystyle
 

yo thats a shame you dont remember me.
cuz im ten times better then u will ever be.
but forreal i dont wanna waste time.
cuz u like the word orange u dont never rhyme.
u find me on the block wit an ak n a 9.
and they always barking like a k9.
i'm j-lite what you no about me.
6 months and i'm finally free.
now j is lighter than you that half the carbs.
and j is better than you in just half the bars.

Errrrrrrrrrr i duno what to say.You already know what i'm gaonna say about the length and structure and all that so i guess i ain't gotta say it. Anyway i think you should work on your vocab as well. But elevate all other aspects of your game otherwise your vocab will be left unappreciated.trust me i know this firsthand.
Peace

oh do i gotta drop links? idk i been out for a while.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193299
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=192954

oh and to dude it's a keystyle that happen at like 2 in morning no shit it's gonna be short