this is hip-hop
 

wanna start it? must be retarded
fill ya chest wit particles, leave ya heavy hearted
emotions departed, potions i farted
to delete tha least, atleast, slaughter like a butcher
when i push ya to edge wit tha sledge make ya dance like hammer
before i slam ya with tha steel, ya feel it, its real
cant conceal ya wounds, open like tombs, in tha thriller video
hadda kill a ho, got caught cheatin, askin whats tha dillio?
so i said really tho............. and bust thru tha basement door
to my replacement whore, make a statement raw
so you can smell tha beef, and tell ya teeth
that they soon to make room, deseace ya lease
null nd void, cease ya peace, paranoid
lookin ova ya shoulda, chills gettin colda
when i send ya ass to north dakota
shook up like a soda, explode like bomb
atoms and shit, nuclear hit, causin deformation
of transportation, leave ya legs twisted
cuz im the wickedest, sick-at-this
so fresh, cant touch my shit witta stick :wtf:

:laugh2: little bit of humor, i wrote this in school cuz i got bored, so dont be hatin lol

hahahaha you fart potions too??...wow *sigh of relief* thank god im not tha only 1 :thumbup:

haha.. you know it kid.. *farts magic* haha

lmao...no doubt

hmm...i dont really kno wut to say about this piece...it didnt really make n e sense...ur wordplay was weak...and ur vocab too...u need to work on structure...the rhyme scheme in ur first six lines was fucked, seriously...this verse had no topic...it was just blah...so i cant really give u feed about that...u need to open ur mind up...and think of shit to talk about besides wut ur talkin about now...pretty weak overall...3/10

i know it doesnt make sense i jus wrote it down real quick on a little peice of paper i found lol its jus a random piece i felt like showin yall

Well why didn't u fix it up for it to make sence and then post it?

cuz its not a real rhyme i ever plan on using.... its jus a little thing wit some multies in it, plus i think its kinda funny.. nd on the structure i know its fucked, its mean to be rapped in one continuous flow, so structure is not necasary