*Corona Calm*
 

well, to be truthful.. when i saw who the wrote this piece. i thought this was gonna be pure fire.. but there was something about it i didnt like.. i think it was the way you worded it.. it just came off as really forced.. the imagery was nice.. nice vocab.. but the wording was just a bit off...

thats becuase you have to read it poetically.

i read it poetically.. the wording just seemed choppy.. i really didnt like how u would end a line in the middle of a sentence.. then continue it on into the next line.. to me its just not my style but its all good..