¤ÐÅž¤ vs MaRVJay1009
 

Battle Rules:pinkslip....3-0=ko

6-10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
n if i win, you forfeit the last win you got off me
if i lose, i leave the site forever......now checkin hoe

Minimum posts to vote: 200

Check in by: 06-15-05 at 03:39 AM

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Win by 3-0 KO

¤ÐÅž¤ has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-15-05 03:15 AM.

MaRVJay1009 has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-15-05 03:27 AM.

y am i battlin dis kid again dis fucker's trash,ya verses=clutter,trash.
dis nigga use 2 be quiet but i can see sombody really "KURUPT(ed)..DaZ".
so i gota check dis hore.6-10 lines? nah ya wack ass need a extra four.
but da only time you'll ever "sell a cd"...........u "workin in a record store".
i'll slaughter him,rite now he sittin down with paper & some saught of pen.
rv rides dis fag just "abreviate DOCTOR" u'll see how get'z all his wins. *DR.*
so stupid come fuck with me,i aim good i hope ya ass can duck quickly.
or ima leave ya face like "half of g-unit".....u gone have a "BUCK/FiFTy".*
im sick daz u couldn't compare....& fam how are you da crook of da year.
u got no criminal record...only "jail"*gel* u know is da shit u "put in ya hair".

opener=ya'll know who he stole his name from daz from da dogg pound
3rd=when u abrevviate doctor its dr. which mean dick rider
4th bar=a buck fifty is whut they call when u get slashed in ya face with a razor..u'll get da rest

nuff said....if niggaz gon hate....hate its nothin but if u gon hate just make sure u battle me after dis

look...
dont men-chin triggers or ya home to say what ya drag-on about(queen)
cuz afterall RV's community's usta smokin J's n putting 'em out..!
you fuckin roach, i mean cock.. like when your deep throaten'em
how do ya sir-cum to vets... even when their off hand-in 'em.....!
dopeness to you is a snap shot, damn then you a clip-per bum?
cuz i trade W's for J's, nowonder marv's-way is past random(ran dum)
i bet you'd rob a bitch n her drinks place just to be a boaster
but ya elevations to short, even in lines for roll-her-coasters..!
better start tossing ya shit drops so ya ass can be futhered
i mean this battles an ironic trial..
............cuz this time Oh'J's, the one that got fuckin murdered


done merked, now gimme why win hoe :thumbup:

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

I expected a little bit better battle, but still good.

Daz:
dont men-chin triggers or ya home to say what ya drag-on about(queen)
cuz afterall RV's community's usta smokin J's n putting 'em out..!
Decent punch. The personal was ok, but could have been stronger
you fuckin roach, i mean cock.. like when your deep throaten'em
how do ya sir-cum to vets... even when their off hand-in 'em.....!
Ehh, a cock and cum line? Come on Daz.
dopeness to you is a snap shot, damn then you a clip-per bum?
cuz i trade W's for J's, nowonder marv's-way is past random(ran dum)
Lol, nice wordplay and personal.
i bet you'd rob a bitch n her drinks place just to be a boaster
but ya elevations to short, even in lines for roll-her-coasters..!
Decent punch
better start tossing ya shit drops so ya ass can be futhered
i mean this battles an ironic trial..
............cuz this time Oh'J's, the one that got fuckin murdered
Lol, nice wordplay on this closer.

Overall, I liked some of your wordplay, but some of it wasn't that great. One bar I didn't like at all (cock and cum), but you made up for it with your personals and punches. I think, not really sure if you meant to, but you made fun of Marv's style with the ...? If not, it seems like you did so I liked that. Not a bad verse, but not the best I've seen.

vs.

MarvJay:
y am i battlin dis kid again dis fucker's trash,ya verses=clutter,trash.
dis nigga use 2 be quiet but i can see sombody really "KURUPT(ed)..DaZ".
Ehh, personal was kind of weak here. Wording could have been better
so i gota check dis hore.6-10 lines? nah ya wack ass need a extra four.
but da only time you'll ever "sell a cd"...........u "workin in a record store".
Booo at the filler, ending punch was ok. I've seen that concept a lot though.
i'll slaughter him,rite now he sittin down with paper & some saught of pen.
rv rides dis fag just "abreviate DOCTOR" u'll see how get'z all his wins. *DR.*
I'm starting to see the forced wordplay. Ending punch was bad.
so stupid come fuck with me,i aim good i hope ya ass can duck quickly.
or ima leave ya face like "half of g-unit".....u gone have a "BUCK/FiFTy".*
You talk about shooting, then end with a razor? Wtf? Work on your wording
im sick daz u couldn't compare....& fam how are you da crook of da year.
u got no criminal record...only "jail"*gel* u know is da shit u "put in ya hair".
Ok wordplay. Not amazing though cuz jail and gel don't sound a lot alike

Overall, I can see where people were talking about forced wordplay. Some of your wordplay was ok, but a lot of it was forced or just plain bad. I liked one or two of your punches, but other than that. Also, work on your concepts. Like I said you went from a gun to a razor. So your concept did a 180.

I am going to have to go with Daz in this battle. His punches and personals were harder, and also his wordplay was a little wittier than Marv's.

v-Daz
(No hate just an honest opinion)

This was feedback posted for ¤ÐÅž¤
 

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Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

y am i battlin dis kid again dis fucker's trash,ya verses=clutter,trash.
dis nigga use 2 be quiet but i can see sombody really "KURUPT(ed)..DaZ".
6...decent opener, a nice concept to use for a personal and you pulled it off.
so i gota check dis hore.6-10 lines? nah ya wack ass need a extra four.
but da only time you'll ever "sell a cd"...........u "workin in a record store".
4...weak man, the setup was irrelevant and the whole sell a cd concept is played, ain't you used it before to??
i'll slaughter him,rite now he sittin down with paper & some saught of pen.
rv rides dis fag just "abreviate DOCTOR" u'll see how get'z all his wins. *DR.*
5...weak again, the setup was too basic and irrelevant and the whole doctor concept was not that original really.
so stupid come fuck with me,i aim good i hope ya ass can duck quickly.
or ima leave ya face like "half of g-unit".....u gone have a "BUCK/FiFTy".*
6...clever 2nd line, i was feelin the concept even though g-unit shit is getting played out.
im sick daz u couldn't compare....& fam how are you da crook of da year.
u got no criminal record...only "jail"*gel* u know is da shit u "put in ya hair".
6...decent wordplay, quite original concept, overall good punch.

OVERALL: 27/50


dont men-chin triggers or ya home to say what ya drag-on about(queen)
cuz afterall RV's community's usta smokin J's n putting 'em out..!
5...not feelin this opener, both concepts have been used before, especially the smokin J's concept on marv, that shit is just gay now!!
you fuckin roach, i mean cock.. like when your deep throaten'em
how do ya sir-cum to vets... even when their off hand-in 'em.....!
7...LMAO!!!! a decent concept, getting played i guess but this was funny as hell.
dopeness to you is a snap shot, damn then you a clip-per bum?
cuz i trade W's for J's, nowonder marv's-way is past random(ran dum)
7...DAMN!!! nice play off his name, good personal punch.
i bet you'd rob a bitch n her drinks place just to be a boaster
but ya elevations to short, even in lines for roll-her-coasters..!
6...decent wordplay, kinda fell off compared to the previous two bars though.
better start tossing ya shit drops so ya ass can be futhered
i mean this battles an ironic trial..
............cuz this time Oh'J's, the one that got fuckin murdered
6...decent closer, the OJ shit has been done before, you put a decent twist on it, but still it is kinda played.

OVERALL: 31/50


decent battle.....
marv had a few nice lines, couple of weaker ones and one real gay ass one, stop recyclin concepts...try and use some original material
likewise to daz, he also used some played concepts, had some killer lines in there, overall i think he was more consistent though.....so he wins in my book.....

V/ - Daz

RTF!!! wicked one battle in my sig!!!!!

Voted For: ¤ÐÅž¤

¤ÐÅž¤ - Good spit, your flow was tight, you had some good wordplay, and hard hitten punches.

Best Line - dont men-chin triggers or ya home to say what ya drag-on about(queen)
cuz afterall RV's community's usta smokin J's n putting 'em out..!

Worst Line - NONE

MaRVJay1009 - Good spit also, it flowed well, had some good wordplay and some pretty decent punches.

Best Line - so stupid come fuck with me,i aim good i hope ya ass can duck quickly.
or ima leave ya face like "half of g-unit".....u gone have a "BUCK/FiFTy".*

Worst Line - NONE

OVERALL - Close battle here, but I think ¤ÐÅž took this one with the better wordplay. Marv some of your lines were weak, shoulda came with harder punches and more creative wordplay.

Vote - ¤ÐÅž