Battlefield Scars...(RAW)....
 

Hook:

The scars sho from the past, future or now
My battlefield scars show a story, they speak so loud
I dont even have to say a word to be heard
I never fear, A real soldier sheds tears

Verse One:

I am a man and I still cry, to say i dont would be a lie (16)
Sometimes, I have this urge to contemplate suicide (15)
I have this desire to die, cant you see it in my bloodshot eyes (17)
But I remember God, and through my rhymes, I realise
That inside I wanna ride, its a suprise to me, that the
Best of both worlds can collide, end all the beef and the lies
Enter the enteprise of the scarred soldiers, we rise
We battle with fists, clenchin authority, we drop the nines

Hook:

The scars sho from the past, future or now
My battlefield scars show a story, they speak so loud
I dont even have to say a word to be heard
I never fear, A real soldier sheds tears

Verse Two:

The soldier is essential because he got potential
We all soldiers and we all hold the name "intermental"
With all this calamity, we stil got prosperity, so we prosperous
We Rhyme At Will, we RAW, aint no body can stop us
We special soldiers and report to our own duty
Of murderin wack emcees and bringing lyrical fury
You might not wanna see our rhymes, but were demandin attention
20 yrs from now, when youre discussin the best dont forget to mention

Hook:

The scars sho from the past, future or now
My battlefield scars show a story, they speak so loud
I dont even have to say a word to be heard
I never fear, A real soldier sheds tears

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uppin this cmon people hot isshhh

This shit was pretty descent. Good flow, and a nice point to it. Well, actually, I dont think the name went well with the song, but thats ight. Nice rhyming, coulve been stepped up a lil, but i see u elevated somewhat. it wasnt that interesting to read, but it was coo. just come harder wit creativitie and more interesting, and i think this couldve been flawless.

6.9/10

thanks man...im puttin it in audio...hopefully soon

uppin .............

uppin this cmon yall..........

uppin cmon people

The soldier is essential because he got potential
We all soldiers and we all hold the name "intermental"

Was nice

Flow could of used some work in places i didnt feel the stretched bars at the end to i felt it ruined the flow there

Concepts were nice, a nice read i especially like how u incorperate hooks into all ur pieces again quite catchy

Respect
EZ

Thanks dizzee....uppin

concept is pretty nice....
lyrics were good
flow could use some touching up at places

hmmm some rhymes seem'd a lil forced..but not too noticeable

enjoyed the read

stay real

thanks homie........

uppin dis..........

this was an ok drop not good doe but got potential some of yo lines didnt rhyme so it threw off da flow but i got the meanin of yo drop but you can elevate some upp yo vocab rhyme scheme and you wud be str8 6/10

Yo im feelin you.....ive elevated tho alot....i made a remix of this and thats hot....but im gonna drop that in audio