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Vick Slate 06-17-05 10:26 PM

L.o.v.e.
 
I know that in this love letter, I've started it wrong..
Because your beauty is too immense to explain in a song
Or maybe I'm just awe struck, and at a loss for words..
Like my brain was blown out, and left my thoughts on the curb
I'm lucky to have you, and I'm even more lucky to know you..
Good or bad i cherish every single moment we go through..
I love you, even though it hurts because i never see you..
It's not enough to be connected at the soul, i wanna be you..
I think about you constantly, Kissing you in my flashblacks..
and whenever i tried to be smooth, i remember gettin laughed at..
It didn't hurt me though, I knew it was because I didn't need to..
I felt everything that you did, if you got cut, i'd bleed too..
and every word you ever said to me, echoes in my memory..
and my love glistens like a heart etched from emery..
I wish i was hollywood, so i could make you into a movie..
so when I lacked motivation, I'd use your beauty to move me..
Or atleast I could capture your eyes as the moon hits 'em
Exposing your thoughts, wishin we were in my room kissin..
runnin my fingers through your hair, you whisper in my ear
"I'm not ready", shh you dont have to speak, we can just lay here..
this is just what I remember, it's been a while since i've seen you..
I remember sayin "I just want your love" you replied with "me too"
and Now i'm stuck writin this letter, with no way to send it..
you don't even exist, this whole time i've been pretendin..
I guess if i wrote it, I could feed my craving for unity..
because even the loveless, knows love has no immunity..
But it's okay, I'll seal this up, and lock it way untill I need to..
I guess i'll have to be patient waiting for the day I finally meet you..


links- khatharsis(2x)

~*Khatharsis*~ 06-17-05 11:46 PM

yo this was nice, nice imagery. showed some excellent emotion. you really placed your words very well. this was orderly and very tidy. it kept me drawn in by the indepth and the strong emotion. this was very nice. keep dropping

Vick Slate 06-19-05 12:58 PM

thanks homie....uppin

Vick Slate 06-19-05 10:03 PM

yo this was mad deep......uppin

J.Terror 06-21-05 12:23 AM

I wish i was hollywood, so i could make you into a movie..
so when I lacked motivation, I'd use your beauty to move me..
(Favourite bar...Nice!!!)

Dope shit...nice concept, keep droppin
you remind me of myself the way you write...lol
nuff respect son....deUce

Macca 06-21-05 02:44 AM

work on your shit a little bit. thats all I have to say... but nice job anyways...

Vick Slate 06-23-05 01:04 PM

work on my shit...like what nigga

fuck u

mizz fyre 06-23-05 02:05 PM

this was a really nice, sweet drop....felt all the emotion you put into it and you came deep with it
I wish i was hollywood, so i could make you into a movie..
so when I lacked motivation, I'd use your beauty to move me..
^^^my fave lines....keep doing it

fluidmoon 06-24-05 10:28 AM

This was dope. you set this up nicely, with your words, the imagery was great and the emotion was deep and heartfelt, nice vocabulary as well. I liked the metaphors. your style shined through on this piece,keep it up.1

Vick Slate 06-27-05 10:10 AM

dope thanks....

Bangalore 06-27-05 12:26 PM

your set up was very nice... just work on it a little more.. up your vocab some but besides that i was really feeling the concepts behind it and the delievery was above average and thats werd

Vick Slate 06-27-05 07:10 PM

average what?? blah

thanks 4 the feed tho appreciated

Vick Slate 06-30-05 11:54 PM

upppppppp and away

~sokaris~ 07-01-05 06:08 PM

damn you up ur piece alot.

Vick Slate 07-02-05 11:11 AM

shut up ho.....


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