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"If I Die Tonight"
"If I Die Tonight" Verse 1: I know i'm ready if tonight is the night that I say goodnight to the light Pain ignites when I write, my life called death to invite to the fight I wanna know Ive surpassed first if these are sure to be my last words Ive always had this vast thirst for supremacy which makes the glass burst Im not afraid when I sit and pass away as Im getting caught by shade I'll stop to pray and thank my friends for everyday when pain stops my brain I hope you know I wasnt fake from my lyrics that show I didnt break I look below my fuckin fate and see enemies that hope I dont awake Taking factual pauses at my funeral cuz you know it wasnt natural causes Life loss is from crimes strife bosses hung and crucified on actual crosses Hook: Im here glowin sweaty cuz I know Im ready if I were to Die Tonight.. Flowin steady with lyrics showing deadly wont even Try to Fight Thankin family n friends for handin me pens when I Ignite The Fright Demandin the End for Expandin my Trends ready to Invite the Night Trust Me Ya'll will know I was ready If I Die Tonight Verse 2: I will absorb the cries because I already know that I was born to die Dont mourn or sigh because I'll be watching so dont ignore the sky Ive got my thoughts prepared and I thank the Lord that Im not that scared Id rather get popped in a plot thats not that rare then get locked in chairs The only thing I'll miss isnt possessions but that beautiful being I kissed Sing to this at my funeral let em know im gone but still the king exists The reason I'm not mad is because it was expected in the seasons I have had Noone speak when it is sad fuck my enemies never thought of treason as a fad Death from clashes Burn me so Im ready for my future and spread my ashes Life: Ive said Ive passed it when i look in front of me and aheads the flashes Hook: Im here glowin sweaty cuz I know Im ready if I were to Die Tonight.. Flowin steady with lyrics showing deadly wont even Try to Fight Thankin family n friends for handin me pens when I Ignite The Fright Demandin the End for Expandin my Trends ready to Invite the Night Trust Me Ya'll will know I was ready If I Die Tonight |
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damn dat was nice...i'm really feelin da flow papi....nice 9/10
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good shit dude... good shit... Best emotional type of shit i've seen from you... Seems you've really elevated in the emotional area... Multis and shit... dope stuff man... good shit to read homie... 8.5/10...
p.s.... we need to collab |
and 8.5/10 because i know you're capable of more... :thumbup:
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Word at that collab OSB I'll holla at you on aim and we'll talk about it. Good looks Messenger. Uppin this shit
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up up and up some more
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nice creativity... I like it......
good vocab use nigga keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! nice emotional shit LOL 9.3/10 |
this was great man, really felt what you were sayin, keep it up.....
.....RTF on Second Coming, appreciate it |
Thanx
Uppin for more feed!!!!! |
i liked it a lot, the structure was good, vocab was very fluent (not too flashy, which is good), the rhyming/multis were on point, and it was just overall very well written. However, you seemed to over use the phrase "die tonight" and "night" a little bit for it being only 2 verses (i counted 3- die tonight's and 4- forms of 'night's; counting only one hook and the verses), i really liked some of the phrases that you used like "I will absorb the cries because I already know that I was born to die
Dont mourn or sigh because I'll be watching so dont ignore the sky" although most of the multis were good, some seemed forced a little. For example, "Taking factual pauses at my funeral cuz you know it wasnt natural causes Life loss is from crimes strife bosses hung and crucified on actual crosses" 'Factual pauses' sounded odd because what's factual about a pause? it's just something that you do. technically, it makes sense, but it's a stretch. I really liked how you phrased the crucification of jesus as a boss. Overall, I liked it very much. I would rate it a 8.5/10. |
^^ Thats what the fuck Im talkin about!! Good looks there ma
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oh... and RTF.... LOL |
Drop a link and I will RTF
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