L' Evated
 

L'EVATED
Down in the muck, He sees you stuck
lying a rut, yea He knows what b up.
Closin your eyes, wishin you’d die
only to wake up to find you r alive.
Feelin like some is watchin you
Feel like everytime you do somethin
ur conscience b eatin you.
Hearin a lil thang inside your head
sayin, man don’t do it, so you fled.
Then all your homeboys ended up dead
you thank ur lucky stars, you weren’t
shot up with lead.

Funny how life goes, on and on through
rhymes and flows, we carry on like no one knows
when someone be watchin us with a robe.
He’s sittin there trying to let you come to him,
your stubborn, impatient and hollerin
He gonna get you slobberin, and get u in a mess
you can’t get out of, so you better think fast and
get Him while the offer lasts, cuz soon your life
will past and you’ll be sittin in a pine box covered
in ash.


Ashes ashes, dust to dust, young life to lead so do what we must.
Man we got all things 4 you 2 try, smack, crack, PSP and others
that make you alive.
We got girls in the back all loaded up and waitin, beers in the back
two for the takin
You sit there and watch them all give in, watchin them give in to
all they’re sins, what will you do man, will you join em?
Will you go off with them to the emergency room mournin?
Cuz ol boy is dead, o.ded on meth, he told you in his last breath
man that was some good shit its gonna last.
Half ur buddies w/ std’s, babies and other Godforsaken disease.
When you hear that lil voice peepin in ur brain, listen to it and
never refrain. Cuz you never know

Funny how life goes, on and on through
rhymes and flows, we carry on like no one knows
when someone be watchin us with a robe.
He’s sittin there trying to let you come to him,
your stubborn, impatient and hollerin
He gonna get you slobberin, and get u in a mess
you can’t get out of, so you better think fast and
get Him while the offer lasts, cuz soon your life
will past and you’ll be sittin in a pine box covered
in ash.

this was good babe, concept and vocab was good, structure ok, keep it up

this was ok, sort of rambled on sometimes tho, you need to make ya bars some kinda structure, cuz it was hard to tell where one bar ended n one began ya feel me?
i give it a 6.5/10 keep doin ya thing.
gimme some honest feedback on my open mics links are in teh sig holla at me