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Life- Paranoid aka. Parallel ft. Indeph
Life Sometimes you can fall, even as life started to get Better.. Anyway, even if the government wants that political Letter.. All you need is to make the right Decisions… Just keep it on the real, feel for thoughs who have been Down.. Never be a hound, be a proper noun, prove your furious Sound.. Picturing the wonderful cinerary is my Visions… Proceeding with empathy, you’ll never feel such bad Karma.. Inflicting pain gets you lost honor, that’s to much Drama.. Paranoid Well I’m confused in this processing political Division I’m lost pondering, having to choose a better Precision Going wrong ways, I stand locked down in Frustration I’d never start using meditation to ease my Temptation Showing such unbelievable stress, I felt so Paranoid Unable to avoid the politics, I was more then Annoyed Stuck in this horrid place, I was considered a Disgrace As they seen my face, they’d yell words in a fast Pace I thought it was racism, I knew they needed Idealism At least I show people the respect with my Realism Seeing the facts, I prove myself as I’m never to Relax I show such tactics, life is blown with my godly Axe I hate people that think they know, I wish I was Fate Then I’d create and fix the discrimination of all who Hate People that think so erotic, to proceed on that Chronic They’d always think there the best, they’re to Ironic This generation of warfare, really puts people Down A lot still call me a clown, there’s no good in my Frown Why am I so hated, so frustrated, way to Temptated I finish in a lower degree, never ever to be Nominated Sometimes you can fall, even as life started to get Better.. Anyway, even if the government wants that political Letter.. All you need is to make the right Decisions… Just keep it on the real, feel for thoughs who have been Down.. Never be a hound, be a proper noun, prove your furious Sound.. Picturing the wonderful cinerary is my Visions… Proceeding with empathy, you’ll never feel such bad Karma.. Inflicting pain gets you lost honor, that’s to much Drama.. Indeph. Crucial important fluids..,still movin and ample. Tense structures in my back healed brewin a candle. It all balances out on the milky way,my tempers' is feelin pain.. A moment,mental bruises'll heal,after twisted a million ways. and it changes untill,the cycle arives comin back,when a crisis attack. this is life as a craft.Boomerang ways,waves timely can raft. your mind seeing beautiful images at the time that you die. Like a God's wish.Similar to the mob hit.promises in the closet. Life cannot invision a toxin,damages to your esafugus. Isn't the biggest of problems.Life is spritual and physical..... simple as a genesis topic.....the age of digitials stoppin........soon prostitutes.... will be robots with boobs.....babies today is not the youth. passed the proms and suits.Life is like juice at a constant boost. Sometimes you can fall, even as life started to get Better.. Anyway, even if the government wants that political Letter.. All you need is to make the right Decisions… Just keep it on the real, feel for thoughs who have been Down.. Never be a hound, be a proper noun, prove your furious Sound.. Picturing the wonderful cinerary is my Visions… Proceeding with empathy, you’ll never feel such bad Karma.. Inflicting pain gets you lost honor, that’s to much Drama.. |
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ayo the last verse in italic is NOT repeat NOT mine.
the stanza after my name is mine.The one after isn't. |
yo this was a decent drop. the content was hot and original for real. the structure was good as well and the vocab was more advanced than most of the other pieces i've seen recently.
you lot shoulda added like one more verse with both of you rhyming in it, but no matter cos this piece was nice. keep it up can you RTF on my piece cos its gettin mad slept on for real: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=196718 ~Peace~ |
temptated isn't a word
RTF. |
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shh. dont tell anyone uppin |
yo this was some hot ish in my perspective...good concept and good imagery....nicely writtin not all stretch out and shit....good use of vocab and worded OK....metaphors were decent and nicely played...opener was aight and closer was killer on Indephs verse....opener on paranoid was decent and closer was not that bad....
Going wrong ways, I stand locked down in Frustration I’d never start using meditation to ease my Temptation good line from paranoid^^ It all balances out on the milky way,my tempers' is feelin pain.. A moment,mental bruises'll heal,after twisted a million ways good line from Indeph^^ overall-8/10 |
thanks a lot.
uppinizzle |
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