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A Quick Sixteen
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=197929 Yo i'm emptyin clips of lyrical diamond tips Sprayin, slayin fakes the very second that they slip Leavin niggas need artificially replaced hips Heart beatin, rapidly drummin like drum n bass kits Killin all my foes with flow of murderous prose Apparently your crew is gonna...ha!..."murder us hoes!" Fool please! I'll batter you "g's" n shatter your knees If your trapped in your wackness, i'll batter you free These days to fuck with me, you must be blazin haze I'm stuck up in my crazy phase of leavin niggas graze n dazed Straight uppin my pace, my flow is far from basic Surpassin so called "illest" cats, but niggas can't face it Got my crew, but me, myself, n i could hurt you Underelevated fool don't fuck around i'll merk you My type of illness can't even be treat with medication I love merkin phonies, so don't act as my temptation Leave a link along with your feed n i'll RTF ASAP.... |
nice
that had a steady flow through it, i particular liked the
'If your trapped in your wackness, i'll batter you free' line Props 4 That |
thanx messenger.....................
................................................. oh shit...................................... ................................................ was happenin luminaz........... ................................................. ain't seen you on this site since before i finished high school |
Yo......your flow was crazzzzzzzzy!!!!
I like this peice a lot.Obly thing that stumped me was that the title didn't fit.I know you meant quick 16 lines.But when I read it I thought it was some gay story about someone about to have his 16th. birthday or sumtin.Glad it wasn't though. Wat would make it better is more profound descriptions.U had killer flow....but desciption could be better. Nice peice |
yo thanx fam.
uppin this shit people........................ |
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198033
^^Yo souljah...can ya leave feedback? |
this joint was straight, good flow and vocab. nothin really else to say as it was just a quick sixteen, but keep doin ya thing. return the favor, i got plenty joints out right now
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yo good wording ov ur verses it helped da flow alot, nyce gangsta peice, good shit 4 a keystyle, real enjoyable read,
itz raw fuckas |
Yo thanx fam.
uppin this shit................... |
uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn...................... ...
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you suck!!!!!
...horrible structure, there was no concept.. |
it was a 16 line keystyle.i wasn't tryna tel a story. but i jus brush your comments off my shoulder cos i know you'd talk that same shit no matter what i wrote. but you entitled to your own opinion even if it is clouded by hate. and me and you know that it is so what more can i say?
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