50 Bars
 

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=197881


Fucka Dyke Jones, how can he be on mix tapes with his wack-lyrics
Cause every time he flows, not even deaf people are trying to hear it
On RV, it really doesn’t matter if you’re a newbie or a fucking vet
As long as your trying to win battles & upping your damn rec.
You might say that I’m not that good, but then again you might
Cause you know I will be free styling, from dawn to night
50 Cent = gay homo, shit, Curtis Jackson is his real damn name
Cause we all know there’s proof, when he went on & kissed The Game
When they made Hate It Or Love It, tell me, is the video or just me?
But who’d where a MJ jersey, with some damn Charles Barkley’s?
Spitting fire every time & you know that, but you stay spitting ice cold
Only time your rhymes would be dark, is if they were typed in bold
Many mysterious to solve, like who killed Jam Master Jay & 2Pac
Many newbs who join this site, really think that their rhymes are hot
But, I aint even beefing you all, but I’ll crack your fucking tooth
Only an idiot would think a phone stall, was really a MIC booth
Some people on RV, think they’re a crip or blood, want to make a bet?
Cause usually both of them don’t spend their time on the internet
Look here kids, don't get mad, cause I'm just saying what’s on my mind
So take your bitching somewhere else, & mess with your own kind
I stay leaving you in the dust, might as well see your ass later
Cause I’m a better man, than most of your average haters
“Your going to get merk’d,” yea that’s what everybody had first said
Sometimes they don’t know what a punch is, if it hit them in the head
People say you have played lines, but every1 has played lines these days
Cause your rhymes couldn’t get any damn gayer, than gay 3 ways
By looks of your skills, can tell, that them shits are just plain
And I’ll make you R.I.P. like the middle of my username
Boyz II Men came back & made a CD together, what’s up with that?
The album was called Throwback, more like it needs to be thrown back
Stay free styling like I always do, think you hot? Nah you’re just a liar
Fuck out of here, cause everyone knows that Jay-Z’s a biter
Just rapping on these beats, while ya’ll think that life’s a sport
But ya’ll admit that Jay-Z bit, then how come he didn’t go to court?
Just telling the truth here and I got 36 bars down, 14 more to go
Don’t tell me that you’re a P-I-M-P, but you don’t have any hoes
Why you smoking that good stuff? It’ll make your mind go crazy
Well everyone I son rappers, cause I got more kids that the Wayan’s Family
Punches are coming towards you, no need to be afraid
& you act like a pussy, but in that case, you’ll never get laid
I be shooting them AK’s, you faggots better get out of my way
But, fuck what you heard, my lines will leave you hurt
& I you’re really coming up short, like AJ’s shirts
He’s from 106 & Park, but I’ll lyrically smash these kids
Cause your rhymes are getting slept on, more than mattresses
Leaving you helpless on the streets, no need to help pricks
But your just like Aesop’s Fables, cause you never cease to exist!

yo my nigga that shit was fire.I Like the wordplay and everything fams.all 50 bars were good~1~pops
10/10

vote on any one of my battles cause it will be much appriciated

not my best.. but give some feedback on
this.. shit here

look just my opinion..
this was long an started to get boring...
the punch's where simplitic..but you had alot of personals..
like i said i don't know..this was o.k..1

uppin this shit

fire i gfive dis 10/10 ace keep it up

So many people on his dick, :nono:

It was pretty decent, can tell you put a bit of effort in but some rhymes were too basic, punches were inconsistant, few weak a few nice ones, thats the truth,.
Pretty decent
8/10.

yea shit was nice, but could be improved...
id say throw a few more multi's in there somewhere, and yea, work on some complexity in some spots...
but other than that i thought it was nice
you had some real nice lines in there, including the parts about game & 50...
but weerd nice job man

''By looks of your skills, can tell, that them shits are just plain
And I’ll make you R.I.P. like the middle of my username
Boyz II Men came back & made a CD together, what’s up with that?
The album was called Throwback, more like it needs to be thrown back
Stay free styling like I always do, think you hot? Nah you’re just a liar
Fuck out of here, cause everyone knows that Jay-Z’s a biter
Just rapping on these beats, while ya’ll think that life’s a sport
But ya’ll admit that Jay-Z bit, then how come he didn’t go to court?''

that was mah fav part this was good you had a lotta truth in here you had nice punches and it was funny in some spots sometimes it feel off but overall ill give this a 8/10

woot... got some feedback

uppin this shiznit

I have to agree with Daubs, it was nice, not all lines were hot like others said. Some rhymes were real weak like....

On RV, it really doesn’t matter if you’re a newbie or a fucking vet
As long as your trying to win battles & upping your damn rec.
You might say that I’m not that good, but then again you might
Cause you know I will be free styling, from dawn to night


Why you smoking that good stuff? It’ll make your mind go crazy
Well everyone I son rappers, cause I got more kids that the Wayan’s Family

When they made Hate It Or Love It, tell me, is the video or just me?
But who’d where a MJ jersey, with some damn Charles Barkley’s?


It had good multies like the bold line, the def thing and the matresses.

Nice job on this for writing such a long peice lol...But had some good rhymes and good flow...i mean overall-7.5/10...Keep up the good work manye...