criminal vs {D.N.A.}
 

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Check in by: 07-11-05 at 05:45 PM

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{D.N.A.} has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-05-05 05:45 PM.

criminal has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-05-05 10:21 PM.

ayo

You Walkin away wit a Title, Im gone Break ya Legz So you a Have Two left Feet cuz it aint Right how you a Criminal for Rapin Kidz/
Itz Hard to Bite Diz, Armed wit Swordz ta Fight Wit, tight wit da Keyboard and Typin you'll just be Equiped wit enough Calcium to be Concidered an Author Writis/(dont stay in jail to long beatin ya dick)
Ya hygene Suckz, My {D.N.A.} iz at Top of da line like my Openin Bar/
Like Tiger Woodz ya Battlez are Below Par, But so Far get you a Hope Star and Nutrigrain cuz Last time you wuz Sick ya Throat wuz Stuck on My Whole Bar/
Im like little kidz wit my Handz cuz my punchez be Throwin Stuff imma call ya Bluff/
Dont think Open minded cuz imma Soe it up, i bet ya Sound sick? right when you Record yaself Throwin Up/

aight u up

u Fuckin Weakling, U step in da Ring?, I'll swing yo Ass-to-da-Ropes....
kick then watch you gargle Bloody Balls after I punt-cha Nutts to tha Back-of-ya-Throat...
Waited a while for u'r come-back, battling me you shouldnt have done-that....
cuz u got fucked so many times, D.N.A wouldnt even help find out... WHOS SON'S-THAT....
nigga, im not fake and ill have u barely breathin...
cuz when they announce the winner, its gonna hurt" more then baby teethin.... EZ!!


weak drop cuz im tierd as hell and almost forgot about this so i keyed this quickly.....

uppin

yall dont sleep on diz...............................

uppin

yall dont sleep on diz...............................

^^^basicly

uppin

WIL RETURN DA FAVOR HONESTLY...............

uppin

WIL RETURN DA FAVOR HONESTLY...............

Voted For: criminal

u were played work on creativitywork on ur structure u shouldnt be in elevated if u tried but ur punches were better work on metas and vocab
dna i dont know whats up wiht ur flow but u need to work on it work on ur vocab and punches u glorified urelf thats not batteling go write an open mic

Voted For: {D.N.A.}

criminal

u Fuckin Weakling, U step in da Ring?, I'll swing yo Ass-to-da-Ropes....
kick then watch you gargle Bloody Balls after I punt-cha Nutts to tha Back-of-ya-Throat...
not feeling this opener, you didn't really bring your opponent down

Waited a while for u'r come-back, battling me you shouldnt have done-that....
cuz u got fucked so many times, D.N.A wouldnt even help find out... WHOS SON'S-THAT...
^this is nice bar, hardhitting punch n cool wordplay as well

nigga, im not fake and ill have u barely breathin...
cuz when they announce the winner, its gonna hurt" more then baby teethin.... EZ!!
^coo wordplay in last line formed into punch, decent closer


{D.N.A.}

You Walkin away wit a Title, Im gone Break ya Legz So you a Have Two left Feet cuz it aint Right how you a Criminal for Rapin Kidz/
Itz Hard to Bite Diz, Armed wit Swordz ta Fight Wit, tight wit da Keyboard and Typin you'll just be Equiped wit enough Calcium to be Concidered an Author Writis/(dont stay in jail to long beatin ya dick)
^decent opener, I feel you wanted to say too many things in just one bar, might have split it up you know, punches were cool though

Ya hygene Suckz, My {D.N.A.} iz at Top of da line like my Openin Bar/
Like Tiger Woodz ya Battlez are Below Par, But so Far get you a Hope Star and Nutrigrain cuz Last time you wuz Sick ya Throat wuz Stuck on My Whole Bar/
^last line is real stretched but the punch is there though, coo wordplay, first line is bleh

Im like little kidz wit my Handz cuz my punchez be Throwin Stuff imma call ya Bluff/
Dont think Open minded cuz imma Soe it up, i bet ya Sound sick? right when you Record yaself Throwin Up/
^haha, funny closer, definitely feeling this bar

Vote goes to {D.N.A.} because I feel despite the awful structure and flow he had better punches and wordplay

Voted For: {D.N.A.}

oooooooooooooooops.......my bad..........................

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This was feedback posted for criminal
 

this battle dont belong here...

This was feedback posted for {D.N.A.}
 

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