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Rap Vs Love (Chapter-One)
My First Child In Life, And I'm Switching My Paste Momma Tripping And My Bro Bitching In My Face Eighteen Years Old......And I'm Choosing My Prime I Don't Try My Best So Am I Really Losing My Mind And I'm A Daddy So It's Kind Of Hard Raising A Kid Damn I Keep Getting Drunk And Still Blazing Up Shit I'm Out Of Choices, And I'm Running Low On Options I Love Her, But I Feel Like Running Her For Adoption I Got A Heart Feeling.. That I'll Be A Bum On The Ride Girl Is My Life, Even Though...I Got One On The Side And Counseling Won't Work Cause I'm Hurting Inside Got This Feeling In My Gut And It's Merking My Pride All I Know Is I Got To Make It.. For My Family's Sake And I Won't Stop Rapping Till They Handing Me Cake I Know I've Got Talent.. But My Girl Won't Support It Trying To Giving Her Everything But I Can't Afford It I'm Passing Opportunities Like Crazy And I Can't See And I Know If I Make A Mistake I'll Be Out Camping Cause My Girl Got A Problem With Me And My Music And I Won't Yell At Her But Please Don't Confuse It Up Late Writing, When She Asks, I'm Mixing My Lies My Excuse Twisting The Truth I'm Still Fixing My Ties If Rap Was Raising A Kid, It Won't Be Worth My While So It's Time For Me To Start Working With My Child Link Number One Link Number Two |
damn this emotion... shit was nice mayn... vocab was good...
...structure was aight, the flow was nice, but overall this shit was nice yo... & like what The Messenger said up there... ...going thru hard times and shit, but hang in there yo, & keep that damn kid! nah mean? stay up... 8.9/10 |
Thanks Both Of You I Appreciate That |
I enjoyed listen it was crazy for real but ya vocab sucks lol cake dude you need to work on yo vocab for real lol, stcuture perfect like always, flow as well... imargery was good nice overall for real....lol @ (Chapter One)....
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this was hot..the purple font made it hard to see tho..lol..
emotion an vocab was outstanding... very hot piece.. I'm Out Of Choices, And I'm Running Low On Options I Love Her, But I Feel Like Running Her For Adoption I Got A Heart Feeling.. That I'll Be A Bum On The Ride Girl Is My Life, Even Though...I Got One On The Side i liked that |
Thank You Thank You Your Far To Kind
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This was a pretty tight drop..nice job animosity...you had okay vocab could have been alot better...Emotions and feeling was on point... you really created a good image in the readers head...Keep it up...structure was good it made your drop easy to read... Overall keep it up just elevate on your vocab and wordplay..
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Thanks Man Weeerdness, But It's Hard To Put Things In Dfferent Words When It's True
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Hmmmmmmm I like the approach you brought to the table, upfront and quick. I like the imagery you put down, painted a picture. You expressed your feelings here (Emotion) Which was nice. Upp on the vocab, and the flow was good. I like this piece. Keep it up.
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yeah this was a good drop, imagery and emotion were the most that stood out, vocab was ok, keep it up man and hang in there
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Thanks Both.................
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Bumping This Biatch Dude
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this was a good drop had nice emotion and people can relate to this nice imargery vocab was ok yo structure was hella nice keep droppin
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