Melting Stone
 

Be still, the ice was broken at will
the arrow hit its mark broken the seal
right in the center
of my frozen heart it did enter.
I feel it heating up, burning, melting the
ice that was as hard as stone.
I feel eyes somewhere gazing on me,
I look up off my chest and lose my
breath hurriedly
As soon as I look I see another soul
I can’t believe it as I feel something
go.
Looking at the soul that broke the
ice, wondering if I should forget it
or think twice.
Eyeing me I see the most beautiful
creature without wings, he is a
God-sent teacher.

Ludicrous and innocent, I was.
Craving and raving, I was.
Missing out and not caring, I once was.
But now I can’t remember what I once was.
As I go on now, with this soul, my new heart
is melted and whole. But there are days
when it gets a little chilly, but then I think about
the say when it all went downhill.
As my eyes spilt and my blood froze, my heart
beated then my eyes closed.

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Nice piece, like how you kept vocab rather simple and yet expressed deep emotion, imagery was good, metaphorical poetic wordings with nice amount of emotion.

thanks uppin 4 some feed.