Chek it
 

rite this is isnt guna be my best,but its jus a quick keystyle tha tuk me a few mins jus 2 giv u an idea of my stuff...ill drop sumthin beta 2moro or sumthin :thumbup:


I spend ma dayz cryin an wunderin wat i did ta "deserve this"
I wudnt hav let this happen, God, if onli i cud "reverse this"
Cold blooded Killer took my man wiv a gun 4 nuthin at "all"
Now my man is in heaven, im in a livin hell for tha long "haul"
Tel me why you have ta do this, why you put tha gun to his "chest?"
Manz shudnt hav ta be walkin round needin a teflon "vest"
an enywayz, it aint protectin from tha shots that ya made ta his "head"
His mind so rich wiv knowledge,he was guna do tha shit he "said"
Cos he was my man, he had a lyfe, he was full of "ambition"
But then u had ta cut him short of his everlastin "mission"
guna make sure that lyfe's rite 4 me,make sure that its "fair"
Meanwhile ur in this prison of guilt livin in knowledge of ur "crime"
Manz wont b rested til ur locked up inside,doin ur "time"
Cuz u awt here,goin crazy in urself,tha thoughts r too much 2 "bear"
Tryin not ta get caught fo doin sick shit,but in urself u real dont "care"
u kno my tears fuel ur hate an ur passion ta kill an cause "pain"
Little boiz like u ,ur not "gangsta" ur jus totali "insane"
lil boiz runnin tha streetz wiv an akay in their "hand"
then u wunderin why tha gyals like me,y we jus dont "understand"
why we cnt comprehend ur love to kill as u "drive"
Gangsta credit is ur passion,an 4 this shit u will "strive"
I dnt giv a shit wat u think bout me an if u'll merk me wen u "ride"
Cuz ima big gyal naw an i dont need a place to "hide"
i'll stand an take tha words u got 2 giv to "me"
but im beta than you,its shit u need to see"
back to my man, naw he was meant ta b there "foreva"
Me an my man, we was good, me an him,we were perfect "2getha"
But there ya go take out tha gun an watch my baby "die"
Oblige as u see my tears, Makez u stronga when I "cry"


:thumbup: id appreciate feebk thanx XxXX

this was a v. good fist drop I see mad potential gurll....yo RTF link in sig to my OM "let loose summer remix)

Okay. This sucked. Really. No hate or beef, but this was pretty damn bad. At least it's a keystyle, but I'm not seeing any of your stuff.

Do you think we're not smart enough to realize when something rhymes? Don't use ~ or " " unless it's like wordplay.

Your vocabulary was way too basic. Your rhymes were so elementary I almost cried.

5/10

Find a better topic...elevate. No hate.

sayf intermental,ill chek it naw(y)
an kein witz , ye i appreciate eny feedback evn if it is negativ

howeva plz not evry1...tha order of tha lines in tha verse is totali messed up! i jus had to edit it like 4 times an i stil cant rememba tha order.lol but sayf guyz XxX

uppin............................................. ......................

decent 1st drop didnt like the vocab much but u got potential

sayf uppin...........................................

By the way, could you RTF on my Bleeding Ink piece?

I love pie...

ye sho

btw jus seen ya fotos in gallery lil cutie lol xXx