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In-Vision 07-11-05 03:08 AM

She.......
 
Breakin laws, the obvious lust drippin from jaws..
I met her through space, since than it's been a magnificent pause..
can't take my eyes off her, I can't help that I like what I see..
but frightened to be... myself, or else... she won't spend one night with me..
I want to touch her like nobodies every touched her before..
but am afraid to go there because I know she's no whore..
If only I could explain to her...exactly how I feel..
and I'd never touch anyone like her so she knows that I'm real..
I want to see all of her, completely exposed in the sun..
and I've chosen the one, I want to be holdin my son..
I know that lust is a sin, but the sacrafice is worth it..
the way she makes me feel, shit I can't even word it..
everytime she walks by, I get lost in attraction..
wishin we were alone, so I could actually take action..
whether she wanted it or not, i know she wouldn't say shit..
accept for "I see what you got, now where do we place it?"
I show her where and when she did it, her face lit up with pleasure..
the ecstasy she felt, no drug vendor could measure..
this isn't what you expect though, in fact, it's opposites exact..
Because I’d rather feel her mind, than hop in the sack..
I want her every thought exposed to me, the sun helps me read them..
and everytime she walks by, it's only her mind that I'm seein..
My creation, my thoughts and beliefs united as one..
is what I mean when I say I want her to carry my "son"
and the pleasure she was given, was from seeing my soul..
which brought me one step closer to achieving my goal..
see all I want in life, is to be loved for who I am..
and she knows my past doesn't make me less of a man..
I know you all probably thought that my lust for her was physical..
but I lust to know her better, and would feel the same way if she was invisible...
because I feel at ease when we talk, and she relates with me..
and getting past my hatred, it started with she...

Kawn Flixx 07-11-05 11:16 AM

Damn In this was dope but i gotta inforce the rule ..Drop a link

In-Vision 07-11-05 03:01 PM

good to see your doin your job..I'm gonna be busy today....buit I guarantee I'll have it by today

In-Vision 07-12-05 05:58 PM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=198571

LADY_LYRICAL 07-12-05 06:13 PM

this woz definately a peace,,,, is dis tru life by tha way ,,, or made up ????

very deep n well thort out...........seemz very real to me lol....

is gud u respect her deep..........n it aint all bout tha sak..... lmao dats incredible these dayz

gd stuff keep droppin fire .........9.5/10 uppin this fo real

.Ike. 08-11-05 11:43 PM

wow this was great man...its a shame nobody replies to stuff like this anymore....the imagery was amazing....you word your stuff perfect....great story behind this.....this was just an all around great peice...keep it up.....

Paranoid 08-12-05 12:19 AM

HOLY FUCKIN SHIT!

i now understand what you sayin now they i elevated topically, its been so long you wont even remember me.

Xclusive aka Parallel. shit man you still a good writer, asnwer me on msn as well, but shit emotion is really good, imagery is pretty good as well but you have such a good flow its jsut like whoa, i had to read it all it inspried me a lot man, the vocabulary was pretty good i wouldnt say anything about that, only thing i'd like to see is you work with more multiples.

rtf in my om Confessions links in the sig.

In-Vision 08-12-05 12:59 AM

thanks for the feedback yall

villagepimp 10-30-05 09:54 PM

dope... Taht's all I can say.

50Cal. 10-31-05 01:45 AM

wow this is truthlly poetry in its finest form.i cant say one bad thing about this its nothing short of godly.perfect flow to it imagery is great the whole shit just reminded me how much i love hip hop and i thank you for that.its not much lately i get to read such good work.

In-Vision 10-31-05 04:53 PM

thanks again for the feedback man....it's dope to see you readin my shit...not to mention leavin feedback like that...makes me wanna write more


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