Pen N' Paper vs Maximus
 

Battle Rules:


6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-14-05 at 03:00 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Pen N' Paper has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-11-05 03:02 PM.

Maximus has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-11-05 03:03 PM.

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EXPLANATIONS
-Just to let yall kno his alias is One Step Beyond
-3rd Bar winnin shoes and converse is a shoe and con is a lie of his verse his verse is just a lie get it.....
-Closer his name is maximus Maxed out like a master card kinda simple but u kno when u max out a credit card.......
-Tha rest is just undastandable.......

Asking for votes? Massive hope and you'd lose with just half my post,
'Pen N' Paper' will get 'tossed so quick' you'd think I was 'passing notes,'
Verse is weak, drop shit and same story, every thing remains boring,
Shit, I even got angry and 'ripped paper' when I was brainstorming,*
Claim he tore me? You think that, but I got something to run by you,
PNP............ The only time you've torn 'One' was dividing one by two,
Need I write more? I might whore, I lose? You're an ongoing debater,
This bitch 'Pen' wrote a diss to me, and I 'spilled inc.' all over his 'paper,'
His words are just corny, wouldn't be hard if your verses were horny,
Battling me? Why should I shit on you, when your verse does it for me...

*I was sayin the paper i was brainstorming i ripped because it was wack i guess, and i 'ripped paper' then. get it? eh? oh well...

10 minute verse.

good battle here upppin this for votes................

Voted For: Pen N' Paper

vote has 2 go 2 Pen.... here... good stuff here... PnP.....
The lines u spit will never hurt, cuz u comin close ur winnin shoes will neva work
U diss me but u tha one getting merked, cuz ur lines are just lies so it’s a Con~Verse
Im original u just borin like prequels u One Step Beyond what?... shit is ur equal
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lol good werd play here.... good stuff..... ahahha
prolly the best line. thre... you took this out wit flow structre and ....overall punches... good stuff.... had better vocab....too

return the favour in the battle below..aiight... ...thnx.. aiight

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I hope you understand why I'm dqing that..........

This was feedback posted for Maximus
 

checking polls....................................

Voted For: Maximus

Alright, you won... obviously, good job i didnt know that you were also text, you basically owned this fool, Pen, mebbe you should give text a rest? eh? eh? just a thought, just a thought. I thought he won because he had the punches, and if it was a ten minute verse, then he really blew you out of the water, Good job Maximus, good job.

Hey maximus u kno taht vote is gettin DQued if mine is.....this guy is just ahtin man.....all he did was talk bout how he hated it didn t even say y or anythin what was worong so....if u DQ my vote this will be also DQued.......1

I understand. Dq it, its all good.....................

uppin.............................................

Voted For: Maximus

Pen N' Paper
Maximus is like a puzzle…
…his lines to difficult to understand and nobody really wants to solve them
He actually thinks he good but he 16 and still has the “scared of the dark problems”
Nah...4/10
U think u good kid ive seen ur battles man and they kinda look like garbage
Max get dropped quick, kid ur embarrassing urself u sound like a garage pop artist
Multies are allright...5/10
The lines u spit will never hurt, cuz u comin close ur winnin shoes will neva work
U diss me but u tha one getting merked, cuz ur lines are just lies so it’s a Con~Verse
Meh...wordplay was allright...6/10
Im original u just borin like prequels u One Step Beyond what?... shit is ur equal
Maximus ur rhymes are tired and played out more then Freddy and Jason sequels
Meh...5/10
OSB just face it u lookin too hard… kid is not even that far…to read between bars
U get Maxed Out kid like Master Card… so take it back and see that u just a re-tard
No...4/10

Don't just use multies, sometimes it throws off the flow. Example is this battle..

Overall: 24/50

Maximus
Asking for votes? Massive hope and you'd lose with just half my post,
'Pen N' Paper' will get 'tossed so quick' you'd think I was 'passing notes,'
Liked this...good flow..8/10
Verse is weak, drop shit and same story, every thing remains boring,
Shit, I even got angry and 'ripped paper' when I was brainstorming,*
Nice line...8/10
Claim he tore me? You think that, but I got something to run by you,
PNP............ The only time you've torn 'One' was dividing one by two,
Word...7/10
Need I write more? I might whore, I lose? You're an ongoing debater,
This bitch 'Pen' wrote a diss to me, and I 'spilled inc.' all over his 'paper,'
Meh...6/10
His words are just corny, wouldn't be hard if your verses were horny,
Battling me? Why should I shit on you, when your verse does it for me...
Owned...7/10

Overall: 36/50

Nice flow in this verse man... real good drop..

Vote: Maximus

Voted For: Maximus

Breakdown:

Punches-Maximus took it easily. With lines like "His words are just corny, wouldn't be hard if your verses were horny,
Battling me? Why should I shit on you, when your verse does it for me..." noone is touching this kid.

Personals-Again, Max took it in this category with the funny nameplay and personals that were hitting and actually having an effect. Pen and Paper, I felt like you were making shit up, cuz how can u prove he's scared of the dark?? Not feeling it man

Wordplay-Max took it without question. Way better wordplay and meta's that were both creative and dissing his opponent.

Overall-This should be a KO on Max's side. HE had everything going for him. Stayed consistent with the hard hitting punches that all connected, the funny personals, and the creative wordplay and meta's

V/ Maximus