Unfinished-Political track
 

This is a song i'm currently working on, trying to get more comfy on the mic and spit my feelings on certain issues going on in the world right now,was a poem i wrote,but i'm trying to convert it to song.. feedback is always returned.. :thumbup:
www.soundclick.com/fluidmoon

links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199169
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=195747

the beat is hella dope........ lyrics was on point...

the only thing i can say as far as advice is solidify your flow....... if that makes sense..... cuz the rhyme scheme is tight..... just the delivery could be polished.... you know? other wise this track was dynamite.... the vocals on the bridge... was that you? cuz that was a nice hook ....... hey if theres room on this track let me know something..... this is gonna be dope when you finished wit it..

"ez"

typing as i listen:

ight the singing at the beggining is kool.... right u kick it. it seems that your emotion is lacking, bit of practice and this song will be dope, lyrics are real good... messege in it is clear... you got potential i could see u ripping this up when u get your emoition sorted... can't wait to hear it... stay up and keep droppin pz

thanks guys, yea,it's kind of a struggle for me to convey what i hear in my head of a beat and put it down in a song, especially when i have to convert a poem i wrote to fit properly, but this beat is dope,so when i finish it, i'll probably re-record it, thanks for the feed, tito,this was that track i pm'd you about..:)

How many free spaces are there gonna be on that track?

the beat is about 4:30 or something like that, but if you want to hop on,i'll send it to you. so far its me,tito, and you..thats about all i need really..if you want on thats cool. you can aim me if you want to.

ight ill get at u on aim tomoro k? im at ma nanas now so i cant get on it

Returnin the Favor:

listenin...
beat is dope! i love this beat lol..did a track on this before
has a coo flow comin in, blends wit the beat
lyrics are on point
quality might need to be upped, but thats it i can understand it
solid verse, hit me up to collab sometime if you down

Wow i think i used this beat before...lol

i love the beat

flow was political u focused str8 from the start...

Quality is iffy but the rest was butter ...

finish it dont be lazzy..lol

link isn't working for me

hmmmmmmmmmm

nvm

now it's working

beat sounds familiar


i wasn't feeling the effect u put on ur vocals

and I cud hear the "noise redux"...


I liked the message here...pretty nice


not a bad joint


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I think you gotta pick a different type of beat. It's a higher pitched beat and your high pitched voice makes it clash. Also, your voice sounds a little too processed. If you only dub the words that rhyme at the end of your lines it would sound a little better. Nevermind......I think that was a chorus at the beginning.....am I right? If it si, you need to use two different pitches and make one volume lower than the other so they complement each other. Also, try to add some more inflection in your voice so you don't sound as monotone.

bet im down lady........ just gotta get at you when you online or something so i can grab the beat or pm lettin me know where i can find it.....

'ez'