.:Before I Go:.
 

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Verse 1
I stand to be judged, will the defendant rise
under god's eyes, flex and sigh to exercise
and rest my mind to place this wreck a side
hence the pride, so i grin as i'm sentensized
my time to exit life, but i never ment to ride
hancuffed, chained, thrown in hell and left to die
never whent inside and found the means to fight
like i tucked and rolled my shit between my tighs
cause i'll be left seperated from my soul in withdrawl
crystalized like frozen lungs after a being rolled in menthol
studied from spine to my skull to find the reason for all
of the shit that's roaming my brains shadowy halls
with the machetes and barrels set on the table
rolled steady through ghettos to blaze the disabled
bitches, thugs, and sluts, since no could ever handle this
cause the years never bring back the wifes and strangled kids

Hook x2
Before i go, sent away from you
i never knew the things i decided to do
would put you in the things you whent through
so before i go, i never ment to do this to you

Verse 2
As i walk into hell, i watch my mother tears roll deep
and i feel god's prayer as he touches me but won't speak
cause i'm waitin' for satan to drop in his warriors
to guide me through hell's dark and deadly corridors
into the devil's throne with his servants dwelling the crossroads
and the stentch of death feeds evil as it reaches my nostrils
sat down and unchained to be replaced by belts from all angles
wrapped by the wrist, strapped and held from both ankles
and i can hear the preast spread the word leave his last blessing
the guy at the switch twitchin his hand to leave my ass guessin
and i can feel the volts surge through my bones and marrow
satan's just blown a rebel, nerves crack and get thrown, then settle
cause the day i was born, hell got it's back torn and shred
since i fell with devil, leaped, ripped off his horns and said
i'm meeting with you now and i'll be here my last day
cause life's a book and looks like he just ripped my last page

Hook x2
Before i go, sent away from you
i never knew the things i decided to do
would put you in the things you whent through
so before i go, i never ment to do this to you

thanks for the feedback man, anymore feed?

upiin' on feed...

this was good, liked the flow, the emotion and vocab were good also, imagery was ok, keep it up

thanks for the feed....

yeah had flow and emotions for real kid liked this good read really like verse one much better than two it just me

thanks for returning the favor mad, anymore feed?

Yo. on the real. this was Tite.... Good flow. Rhyming and a good hook... you got mad talent. I write songs to so you ever need another rapper. Hit me up... Keep it real b

Aight, thanks stique, i'll keep that in mind, anymore feed?

I’m a driver fast and bazaar in a fiberglass car got class
Learn about pivoting to earn a living and dump the trash
Quick with knife because I’m sick of life will cut a slut
Feel used up and now deals corrupt with gambling but
Handling money, too much persuasion in such occasions

my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199778)

Aye son you got Talent fam keep that shit tight man Crazy desriptions. You got a gift use it!!! Holla at cha boy

thanks for that mad...thanks livin legend.

Yo i thought this was a decent piece for real. nice structure. good use of vocab and imagery.
there was a lot of emotion in this piece. good work fam keep it up.

thanks for the feed soulja....will do homie.