Shots in the Night
 

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on these nights, street lights, shoe laced, feet tight
im already runnin, they start gunnin, hold my heat tight
never stop for dome, never drop the chrome, jus keep runnin
dealers on tha corner, tryin to make you tha owner, let ya hold somethin

never stop for tha cops when they pop, jus drop nd continue
dont get caught, or shot, blood pumpin within you
when the bullets left tha barrel, blessed tha rivals apperal
left there gucci nd rolly, left tattered nd holy, shots was narrow
barely missin tha flesh, when it struck the rest, left his crew gunned
lyin face down, trey pound, of lead in cheeck, left stunned
im tha one, who was holdin tha gun, wit 16 in tha chamber
as i pressured tha trigger, the stress grew bigger, until i realease my anger
into tha guts of a stranger, this strange behavior
got docs nd psychiatrists, askin whats gon save ya?
i got a mental condition, plus a sentimental posistion
i cant give up killin, cuz its what my crew does for a livin
if i go home, ill get criticized for choices
if i leave home get victimized for voices
that i hear in my head, tell me shoot that lil punk, shoot him up dead
shoot him upside tha head, nah shoot his legs off instead
then he can limp home, crawlin on his waist
crawlin on bone, crawlin on home, tryna save face
tryna not cry, as he dies slowly inside, victim of homocide
not tryna deny, that i, am the one who gives out death in mass supply

uppin for some feed mayyynngggggg

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Good Flow, structure was aight, It was a good read..I found the vocab was good, Not too out there.. Overall 7/10... Keep dropping hommie...

Return the Fav

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199939

uppin for feedback...

this was aight....
flow was aight...
who cares about vocab but yea if i have to it was aight...
decent drop all around...

iight cool uppin....

can i get in ya crew???

yo drop a tryout in the forum

dont sleep kids.. uppin

koo id say 6an a half out of ten ok flow good vocab erm..i liked sum of he imagery keep at it

thanks for the feed.... someone give me some in depth feed.. if its decently explained ill return tha favor