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.In Tears.
In Tears
*Each Tear Holds A Story ..........Please Baby!...Dont Hit Me!.. ..........Its's 2AM...My God, Where Is He?.. ..........Why Doesn't He See The Person Within Me *Each Story Shows Naivety ..........I Have To Remeber He Has A Short Temper.. ..........He Went To Visit His Mother, Maybe He's With Her.. ..........Maybe He'll Lyke Me If I Was A Little Thinner.. *Each Act Of Naivety Brings Reality ..........Mrs. Jenkins Called The Police..They Issued A Restraining Order.. ..........He Took My Pay Check...Something About Being A Child Supporter.. ..........The People At The Hospitol Told Me I Have An Eating Disorder.. *Each Spirt Of Reality Releases The Truth ..........I want To Die.. ..........I want To Die.. ..........Why Don't I Just Die?.. In Tears |
Girl, do me a favor! Next time pleasssssse make it longer because this had nice potential but I would've liked to see more details ya kno. Had a good amount of emotion, nice storyline, good imagery but please make it longer next time! I like the concept as well, nice nice...
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True. Nice drop here, got that emotion in there. Imagery is goodie, like DQ said you got potential and I wished it would be longer. Vocab is a must to be upp. ^^ I dont know what DQ ment by story-line cause there aint none, lol. But Nice I liked this drop, next time make it longer...Peace.
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thanx...yeah, i didnt get too into writing this...cuz i wrote it for my buddy's class assignment...and she told me not to go off on the deep end....but i appreciated it...
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bumpity bumps.....
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