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Pair-A-Docks vs Illegal
Battle Rules:
8 bars max. No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting who spittin 1st? nike(checkin in) Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 07-21-05 at 10:07 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Illegal has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-18-05 10:08 AM.
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its ya boy illegal showin dis dude dat im not 2 be fucked wit//
i spit fire so 'beatin' me is goin b hard, like a soar dick!!// facin me, ibet u don'teven kno im ya father, yo// dis dude is soft, watch as i demolish him wit a ko// im spitten 2 harsh 4 u, leavin u mentally ill// o no!, my 'brakes' not workin, watch as damage dis nigga as if he was road kill!!// takin me on is settin ur standards way 2 high, so watch me reset it// cuz ur wak nigga, i ain't goin sugacoat shit, i guess u culd call me lyrically diabetic!!// i have ya gurl in my bed explorin her like i am columbus// ur notin i don't even kno why im spitten on dis// lemme finish dis now, call da tooth fairy cause lines da only thing dis nigga bites on// wen u accept dis challege, erbody kne u was fucked jus like some dirty porn!!// |
Pair-A-Docks has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-18-05 12:00 PM.
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where u at doggs imean uppin 4 ya verse aight holla at me
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This kids brain must be off balance....by now he feels feeble....
If this kid was a sick bird....he still couldn't be...... ILL eagle.... Wow......been here since May and only nine posts...oh crap... That means it took you 2 months just to find Bitch Slapped... I hate to kill this kid....but it's my job....I gotta do what I gotta do... How you think you spit hot....when a water gun spits hotta foo... Fuck 8 bars man...I only need 5...what the fuck... 16 lines.... You need a walking stick foo....cuz I know you can't hit me blind... If my rhymes were a food...I swear that you'd be "biting me"... You're just 'trash' kid...fuck your rules you really need 'recycling! Good Luck! |
uppin.........................
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uppin fools cmon
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Voted For: Pair-A-Docks
This kids brain must be off balance....by now he feels feeble.... If this kid was a sick bird....he still couldn't be...... ILL eagle.... ^^kinda forced rhyme here....OK punch though Wow......been here since May and only nine posts...oh crap... That means it took you 2 months just to find Bitch Slapped... ^^Lmao...Nice punch and worded beautifully I hate to kill this kid....but it's my job....I gotta do what I gotta do... How you think you spit hot....when a water gun spits hotta foo... ^^^A lil basic,worded good again,basic rhyme sheme Fuck 8 bars man...I only need 5...what the fuck... 16 lines.... You need a walking stick foo....cuz I know you can't hit me blind... ^^^baah......It was Ok...... If my rhymes were a food...I swear that you'd be "biting me"... You're just 'trash' kid...fuck your rules you really need 'recycling! ^^^Meh......Ok I guess....didn't rhyme though Basic rhyme sheme.Good structure.Need more wordplay/metas and personals.More complextity.Best line was the 9 posts/Bitch slapped one.Made me laugh. its ya boy illegal showin dis dude dat im not 2 be fucked wit// i spit fire so 'beatin' me is goin b hard, like a soar dick!!// ^^ewwww......this line suked too facin me, ibet u don'teven kno im ya father, yo// dis dude is soft, watch as i demolish him wit a ko// ^^WOW...this rhyme was so forced...not even a punch im spitten 2 harsh 4 u, leavin u mentally ill// o no!, my 'brakes' not workin, watch as damage dis nigga as if he was road kill!!// ^^^NO.....this was stupuid Ight...I got things to do so I ain't breaking down the rest of the verse as the it was the same.You had a newb structure....so get rid a that.Don't end verses with "//".Just makes it look newbish.And next time...don;t get carries away and starting talking about yourself whole verse. Vote-Pair a docks VOTE IN LNK BELOW OR I WILL HAVE THIS VOTE REMOVED http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=200965 |
thanx uppin y'all
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uppin for you that sleep on RV
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Voted For: Pair-A-Docks
hmmmm...good battle prety 1 sidee tho pair a docks took this closer by pair was bad not gud man overall gud battle pair took dis! |
uppin this vote please..........
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uppin cmon everyone vote please
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