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Monster Of The Night
This peice is a mixture of poetry/topical.....
monster of the night thy visciousness, destroys flesh at dawn full moon by mourning, guts lay on the lawn Cant visualize the inside of your eye lids for if you dare shut your eyes, it shall come eternally hunting your soul, without rest your constantly stressed, heart pounding listening for noises down stairs, as it creeps waiting patiently teasing your mind to sleep at times waking up sweating, hard to breath because it's not visible for you to see as it fondles your neck tightly with his paws you pray and pray, is this a dream? as the event unfolds, tugging with your mind begging for mercy, upon your sad soul as demons await from the under world to where creatures lay restless creeping around earth, leaving people headless So ........ through every night, you sit awake glancing at the door, clawing your sheets as the night time creature, creeps the streets at night preying upon young flesh children disappearing, creating mysteries but this will forever remain, an untold history |
very good poem/topical lol.. very nice.. u had perfect word usage for this piece right here.. emotion was there... everything was in there man.. iono wut else to say?? jst ur good lol.. okay ur better at poems but im better at topicals ;).. ur cool.. but im cooler!! ;)
man i luv that word!! "COOL!" lol |
This was a pretty good poem/Topical..i was really feeling it nice..short complex lines...good emotions ..and nice imagery..you had alot of feeling in your drop..good wordplay and vocab usuage...Overall it was a good drop..keep it up
And drop a link! |
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Tight concept if i ever wrote a good poem id be like this
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good shit..................
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This was pretty good man...
Definetly not your best, but it was a solid drop. Emotion was good, but you couldve upped the vocab a little and made me feel it a bit more...Shit I dunno, its past my bedtime and I dont know what Im saying :) Imagery was pretty dope, really no problem here...Just up your vocab a bit. I already consider you RV's best Poetry head and a top 3 Topical head, so there really isnt much left to prove on besides that vocab thing.. Pz |
thanx....upping this
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word.ness.to.- that
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nice shit, you need to start battling again man. really felt this shit, the stucture is good but what really got me was your flow that was tight i was actually flowin to a beat wit it, tight shit man nice n short lines good syllable count good choice of words nice imagery just wish it was longer but overall i was feelin it and thats the main point fuck rating you i dont do that shit but anyway good as fuck
reppin 04 ya know. 1 |
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