Souljah vs Detinate
 

Battle Rules:

8- 16 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
No Feeding

60 check
45 spit




Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 07-31-05 at 01:28 PM

Must drop verse in 45 minutes after check in.

Detinate has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-31-05 12:38 PM.

Smite my rhymes? Your imagination must be over-excited
Wid that party of wackness in your mouth where no-one's invited
Nigga ain't for real, how you gonna step with limited skill
Can't test i'm lyrically defined, you only terminally "ill"
Nigga you soft like a tit, none of your rhymes hit
If you licked a canine's ass you still couldn't be spittin "fresh shit"
I take it you from Trinidad with your sig white red and black
Oh look we got a new K-Trini.....with rhymes just as wack!!!
Like still waters running deep you ain't got no flow
With all these blows, you might as well make this a no show.......

self explanatory personals....if you don't get it don't vote

Voted For: Souljah

Souljah was just....better in this one
Better peronals, betta metaphor, so he gets the punches vote
and his flow was on point i could follow it all the way through, where as with Detinate i couldnt pick up on the flow right away

Souljah opened his rhyme better his word-plays were nice it was creative and enjoyable

My vote goes to Souljah

>>>>http://community.rapverse.com/showbattlethread.php?p=2341949<<<<
vote on my battle plz peeps

Voted For: Souljah

Smite my rhymes? Your imagination must be over-excited
Wid that party of wackness in your mouth where no-one's invited
not good opener 4/10
Nigga ain't for real, how you gonna step with limited skill
Can't test i'm lyrically defined, you only terminally "ill"
aight 4/10
Nigga you soft like a tit, none of your rhymes hit
If you licked a canine's ass you still couldn't be spittin "fresh shit"
......lol...6/10
I take it you from Trinidad with your sig white red and black
Oh look we got a new K-Trini.....with rhymes just as wack!!!
.....lol.....aight 4/10
Like still waters running deep you ain't got no flow
With all these blows, you might as well make this a no show.......
bad closer 2/10
20/50

vs.

Souljah aint shit i come wit sick shit to rest him
Tech aint the best but i'll still 'shovel' ya chest in
aight opener 4/10
Get it my shits never comin weak like the kid i''m 2 rip
Spit sick 'mouth '2' mouth' datz why da kid got 'flu' lips
ok line 4/10
Shit u better hurry up cuz im takin over the game quick
Famous? hell no kill a cat make sure u get Framed shit
wack line 2/10
Yo Soljah give up get embarrassed life goes a scary meal
U say u ride shotti but na the only thing ride is a Faris Wheel
wack line 0/10
This is in ya mind to rewind no rearangements so this is stayin
Im sprayin a lyrical masterpiece ya shits is layin and not Payin*
aight 4/10
Mean in the muthafuckin World quit kid im not stoppin
Dick Ride? Not me but u see Tizzle u start hoppin
aight 4/10
Still get away today the day u spitin weak kid quit
im shits sick im done wit u so i split ya 'Lidz' quick ~1~
ok closer 4/10
20/70

Weak battle but souljah did have more punches and consistently outshined the opponent with a betta verse........v/souljah....
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RTF WIT A HONEST VOTE ON 1 OF MY BATTLES IN MY SIG OR VOTE GETS DQUED.........

Voted For: Detinate

v/ Detinate

I thought he had better flow and had some good punches. It also had some mutlis which made the ppunches hit harder.

But souljah had some punches that were better than detinate but in the end i thouight that detinate was better overall.

Ok i got to go somewhere right about now but PnP and Kid Chaos I'ma hit your battles when i get back

Kamze the d/r you need to drop a proper explanation and only then will i hit up your battles

Voted For: Souljah

Smite my rhymes? Your imagination must be over-excited
Wid that party of wackness in your mouth where no-one's invited
^^mediocre multi....but punch lacked..4/10
Nigga ain't for real, how you gonna step with limited skill
Can't test i'm lyrically defined, you only terminally "ill"
^^whack....doesn't work.....3/10
Nigga you soft like a tit, none of your rhymes hit
If you licked a canine's ass you still couldn't be spittin "fresh shit"
^^PLAYED AS FUCK....1/10
I take it you from Trinidad with your sig white red and black
Oh look we got a new K-Trini.....with rhymes just as wack!!!
^^^OK....5/10...
Like still waters running deep you ain't got no flow
With all these blows, you might as well make this a no show
^^PLAYED.....2/10

OK...had some weak ass lines here.FLow was ok...and so was structure.Creativity sucked as did complexity.1st and 2nd bar just didn't hit well.3rd bar was probably your worse.Dog shit?...soft like a tit?...wtf is that?.Ur best line was the trinidad one....and that wasn't so hot.

Souljah aint shit i come wit sick shit to rest him
Tech aint the best but i'll still 'shovel' ya chest in
^^No punch....3/10
Get it my shits never comin weak like the kid i''m 2 rip
Spit sick 'mouth '2' mouth' datz why da kid got 'flu' lips
^^good multi...weak punch...3/10
Shit u better hurry up cuz im takin over the game quick
Famous? hell no kill a cat make sure u get Framed shit
^^No.....2/10
Yo Soljah give up get embarrassed life goes a scary meal
U say u ride shotti but na the only thing ride is a Faris Wheel
^^PLAYED....1/10
This is in ya mind to rewind no rearangements so this is stayin
Im sprayin a lyrical masterpiece ya shits is layin and not Payin*
^^why ya got * for?no punch....1/10
Mean in the muthafuckin World quit kid im not stoppin
Dick Ride? Not me but u see Tizzle u start hoppin
^^???......no......2/10
Still get away today the day u spitin weak kid quit
im shits sick im done wit u so i split ya 'Lidz' quick ~1~
^^no....2/10

Ok...structure and flow was better than souljahs.But without punches...wat good are they?All your punches either sucked or played.Some lines weren't even punches as it was just you glorifing yourself.So next time...just focus on dissing.

Vote-Souljah
RTF Please
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203256

yo.........when you get back on...don't forget to return the favor please....my battle really gettin slept on.....

Voted For: Detinate

BSmite my rhymes? Your imagination must be over-excited
Wid that party of wackness in your mouth where no-one's invited
Nigga ain't for real, how you gonna step with limited skill
Can't test i'm lyrically defined, you only terminally "ill"
Nigga you soft like a tit, none of your rhymes hit
^decent flow so far, could be better. Decent hits and
analogies, but you contradict yourself w/ the "soft like tit"
because, even though i get it, we love tits!

If you licked a canine's ass you still couldn't be spittin "fresh shit"
I take it you from Trinidad with your sig white red and black
Oh look we got a new K-Trini.....with rhymes just as wack!!!
^Good personals
Like still waters running deep you ain't got no flow
With all these blows, you might as well make this a no show.......
^pretty Good finish; I thought your name was Souljah..y is there
a diff, name here?


Det:
Souljah aint shit i come wit sick shit to rest him
Tech aint the best but i'll still 'shovel' ya chest in
Get it my shits never comin weak like the kid i''m 2 rip
Spit sick 'mouth '2' mouth' datz why da kid got 'flu' lips
Shit u better hurry up cuz im takin over the game quick
Famous? hell no kill a cat make sure u get Framed shit
^Up to now your flow is nice and smooth
Yo Soljah give up get embarrassed life goes a scary meal
U say u ride shotti but na the only thing ride is a Faris Wheel
^HAHAHAH
This is in ya mind to rewind no rearangements so this is stayin
Im sprayin a lyrical masterpiece ya shits is layin and not Payin*
Mean in the muthafuckin World quit kid im not stoppin
Dick Ride? Not me but u see Tizzle u start hoppin
^good personal
Still get away today the day u spitin weak kid quit
im shits sick im done wit u so i split ya 'Lidz' quick ~1~
^Good start and finish.

Det has to get this, because its close, but the fact that Souljah
did too much self glor and dissed Det's flow when his flow was
better tips my vote to Det.

uppin for more votes.......................................

uppin this

Voted For: Souljah

Detinate-Your verse was pretty good...had some good concepts and nice attempt at wordplay man.....but you overall came weaker than your opponent...i just wasnt feeling yours that much...overall 5/10

|||DRKMAN||| - Your verse was pretty good structured...flowed well...nice wordplay and punches/personals....overall pretty dope verse.....again you took this becuz of creativity

v/|||DRKMAN|||

rtf in sig.....1

uppin for more votes