Daubs vs. opt1k
 

Check................

Im happy with the topic.

yea man im kool wit this......

TOPIC: scared of the dark


HAUNTING THEORIES....LASTING NIGHTMARES
LOOKIN AROUND NONE SEEMS TO CARE
FEAR THEE NOT FOR I AINT SCARED
FOR MY FEELINGS AND FEAR CANNOT BE COMPARED
WHO DARES TO OPPOSE....A VOICE CRIED OUT
IT GOT LOUDER AND LOUDER!!!!!GOT REALLY LOUD
SO I YELL ITS SHO DOWN SIR,I DONT OPPOSE
HE YELLZ MUHFUCKA U IN MY TERRITORY WHAT U SUPPOSE
IM GON THINK IF YA RUNNIN SHIT AROUND HERE
IM LIKE SIR NO DISRESPECT BUT IM DOIN MY JOB TO CHEERS
PLACE GOT DARKER PITCH BLACK I CANT SEE
ALL OF A SUDDEN I FEEL WEAK AND DIZZY
SHIT BUT SLEEP IS A SLOW CAUSE IF DEATH,I WEEP
FOR ALL THE FALLEN PEOPLE THAT HAD BEEN TAKEN UNDERNEATH
9-11 AND THE BOMBIN IN LONDON OH YET FA SHO
OPT1K STILL ALIVE NOT ACTIVE BUT NOW THEY CALLIN ME SHO
PITCH BLACK MIND AS WELL CALL ME RIDDICK
OR THE BOOGEYMAN EIGHTER IM STILL THE #1 PICK
BITCH I LURK.......IN THE MIDDLE OF THE NIGHT
I STALK AND KILL MY PREY TIL THE MORNIN LIGHT
SLEEP IN THE DAY COME OUT AT NIGHT
NIGGA LIKE A VAMPIRE AT NIGHT I TAKE BITES
SO FEAR THE DARK CUZ U'LL RUN INTO ME
TRUST ME ITS UGLY....JUST WAIT AND SEE


AHAHAHAHAHAHA......

I GOT WRITERS BLOCK SO I VOTE FOR DAUBS I KNOW I SUCK NOW BUT DAMN.......CUZ I
I GOT WRITERS BLOCK ALOT ON MY MIND REAL JUST DISQUALIFY ME CUZ ALSO I MIGHT NOT BE ON FOR A WHILE SO YEA CUZ MY DAUGHTER IS SICK WIT A MASSIVE FLU AND MY GRANDMA IS HAVING SURGERY TOMMORROW ON HER LUNG CANCER IN HAWAII SO VERY BUSY SO YEA!!!!!!!!!!!AYO BUT PEACE I KNOW MY DROP DOESNT REALLY GO WIT THE TOPIC BUT JUST VOTE ANYWAISE PEACE...HONEST FEED NO BULSHIT!!!!!

Still want me to drop, i will tonight if you do man.

Sorry bout your girl.

keystyle.



..Most people set to bed to recharge in peace..
..For me its different, its a battle to live, the weakest decease..
..How can I admit, my age im still afraid of the dark..
..But when the light goes down, i beg for brightness, even a spark..

..A figure lurks in the shadows, sweat drip flows down my chin..
..My membrane represents hollow, how did my fear begin..
..The slightest creek of a floorboard, im suddenly panic ridden..
..My children are fast asleep, how can i keep my manic hidden..
..Supposed to be protective, how can i help when they are stronger..
..I put a hand up to sense movement, my fingers numb and sombre..

..A flash of light blasts, and a lurking movement appears..
..For most people call it an alarm, for me it rids me of my wildest fears..





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SORRY FOR COMING WEAK AND RUSHED, MY COMPS BEEN FUCKED.

Shodown - Even with your situation, im going to act as if nothins going on with you... I felt it was kinda weak, but I notice how you try and bring some vocab in there. Maybe next time be a lil more creative and extend the lines more so you can bring out a stronger rhyme scheme... you know, it was decent... but I felt could have been alot better for the topic.

Daubs - This was accually pretty decent for being rushed like you said it was. The creativity wasnt all there, but your imagery was very nice. Your structure was nice, and the flow was good as well. Nothing incredable, but still went well... I also felt you could have came alot more creative still with the topic. Thats a bad ass topic, lol... well, decent work...

Vote - Daubs

SHODOWN - understand the shit you got going so the weakness of your piece is justified, still it had an alright flow to it and you did manage to stay on topic all the way through. the one thing is that there is a lack in vocabs, and topical pieces are more about complex vocabs to deliver a real nice image of the topic which i don't feel you did here.

DAUBS - for a rushed piece it was ok, flow was nice and i see your not using the text style that you used to for topicals :thumbup: you didn't really get that creative with the topic like shodown but you had the vocabs, nuthing overly creative but i think the plus to your drop was the imagery, it was there and quite strong for a rushed piece and in the end that is what won it for you.

V/ - Daubs

plz RTF honestly on my tournament battle...
LINK: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202505

not explaning this...1sided like a mofo....Vote -Daubs

Well daubs obviously won. As Opt1k already stated. But ill break it down a little bit.

Opt1k:

Your verse was wack. You had no emotion no vocabulary no imagery. It wasnt creative. It was basic, and from some of the stuff ihave seen from you this is your worst piece.

Overall: 1.9/10

Daubs:

You had an ok keystyle. Not much to applaud or hate, but it was decent. Enough to beat Opt1k.


Overall: 5/10


Vote: Daubs

Ko.............

aint gonna explain opt1k i feel for ya...


v/ daubs ripped him ez.

pz

ez battle here didn tlike opt1k's verse way too simple and boring as well daubs had it more.....

v/daubs