un-fuck-widable vs Opt1k
 

Battle Rules:
Topic: Terror
10 - 40 Lines
Crew Votes allowed
No Recycling
No Biting
No Cheating

Un-fuck-widable cannot be disqualified for having more than 5 open battles...


Minimum posts to vote: 40

Check in by: 08-02-05 at 02:22 PM

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opt1k has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-05 11:23 AM.

un-fuck-widable has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-02-05 11:27 AM.

Terror:
I daveld and faught with the ancients,Decapitated matrons...
Kidnaped And masacred the life and intelect of religous patrons/
Fear now cause you've disrupted the Warriors patience's...
My Ethics defeat ya purpose like, Death and survival Basics/
I've for-seen Gore, with visionz of Evils own faces...
Captured the Pharoes and held'em in there own Matrix/
Ski mask worn and tape over the glock so there aint no traces...
With one shot, I'll put you to Eternal Rest in final Breath Paces/
Puttin more men to death than convicted court cases...
First crime, I robbed a man of his last breath with shoe laces/
Construct weapons of mass destruction with Einsteins chemical bases...
Stun minds as ether act abrassive, I Destroy populated praised places/
I spit facts by the zillions... Ya stereotypical millions...
Try to end terror,shoot-to-kill, But end up wastin a brazillion/
Switchin words like last visions, like witnes'n satan pullin the chord...
I cut necks and end life when the time comes to 'Swing the Swords'/
Murder Made-men,tourture and rape pure souls until made red...
Outta pure hatred,I just open my mouth and lyrically slay men/
I stun minds, Like americans re-using the Metrical system...
Recoils from shots, deadly silence after ledtrickle now listen/
Lyrical Ammo, present when i spit more then you can handle...
Watch as I draw 'First blood' in a rage for survival, feircer than Rambo/
Gore adores me... this new world it fuckin bores me...
I bring nuclear holocaust to the innocent like 'World War Three'/
I crucifie souls, and make the crosses when I spit two lines...
World bring back the mutlated soul, as unfuckwidable commits suicide/

shit im crap lol gotta work on this shit gonna start it up

So Many Battle Field Scars Dead Always’s On The News
Who Knows Maybe One Day That Could Be Me Or You
Holdin My Own Terror Strikin Other People
Tryna Stand Tall But Most Of Them Not Even Able
Drawn To Fear Like Moths Are With Light
You Starts Seeing Clear Start Seein The White Light
Heart Beatin Fast Life Fadin Away
Not Able To Say Good Bye And Say What U Wanna Say
To The People You Love Cuz It Came To Fast
Now All Ur Memories Become A Thing In The Past
Not Able To Remember Wakin Up In A White Room
Then All The Memories Start Rushin Back Too Soon.
Not Able To Catch Ur Breathe Life Seepin Through Leaks
Out Ur Bmind Bein Blown Mind Far Too Weak
Seekin Truth Heart Pumpin Real Anxious
But At The Same Time U Stay Calm Real Cautious
Noticing People All Staring At You With A Look
Lookin Demented And Strange Have There Souls Shook
Feelings Real Trauma Fillin Pages Out Like A Book
But You Also Gotta Know There Aint No Such Thing As Half Way Crooks
Understand That Life Has Its Own Test
That Penetrates To You Hardcore Pin Pointin Ur Chest
Bout To Burst Into Flames From All This Pain
But You Also Should Keep Ur Head Up And Stay In The Game
What Doesnt Kill You Makes You Stronger Homie Define That
To Me It Means Keep Hard At Work Till The Monkey Off Ur Back
Flippin The Script Strikin Terror To Many Foes
Holy Day's Golly Way's Gangsta's Slappin Silly Hoe's
Born In The Goodness Gracious Of Bringin All Out Fear
Have U Hurtin So Much Ur Whole Family Drippin Tears
Agility Slashin Bitches Cant Get Rid Of Me
Til The Day I Day Home This My Natural Ability
Flippin Scripts Crackin Bones Breakin Necks
Waitn At The End Yellin Out Tell Me Who Next

Voted For: un-fuck-widable

i guess that this vote deserves to go to unfuck.....he had more confidence in his work and had lots of multis...above all the vocab work was nicely done and so was the punches....u were bored so u done a lot of multis...no arguing with that....i guess that if ur bored u make a lot of multies.... nice drop


opt1k..
i liked your flow.....it was structured better and it flowed easily...but i just didnt quite feel that this was your best...i hav seen you perform but this aint half of that...a bit of elevation shud get u this vote




Vote unfuckwidable!!!!

Voted For: un-fuck-widable

i like un fuck widables verse better it flowed and had metaphors and many punchlines

Voted For: un-fuck-widable

ok Opt1k urs seemed to much like a song which is really bad for this topic and u never stuck to one thing like half way crooks from dying soldiers dont make that much sense man. Also ur vocab was slipping every now and then Ancious dont rhyme with cautious lol. I think unf did a great job I loved his piece. Both keep writing.

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Voted For: un-fuck-widable

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terrible topical battle eva......

ok...this topic for this battle was horiible.And then the verses were just.But...I topicals are versy different from battlin...
you guys need to word your stuff better.You guys were all over the place.
As for flow and such...Opt1k had a newb structure...and a very basic rhyme scheme.
Content was bland.But Opt1k..ya can't just go around stating shit...ya gotta use metas and shit.
Weak topical but I gotta give it to

Vote-Un-Fuck -widable

yea man i know i need work at that shit homie but topic aint really bout metaz man its about the lyrics and how it relates to the topic adn yea i hated the topic but that what he wanted

Topicals do need some metas homie.
Ya can't just go blantatly staing shit out of the blue.Ya gotta leave shit for interpretation for the reader