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DQ 08-03-05 07:07 AM

War
 
War


Innocent children crying, soldiers dying on foreign grounds
Terrifying sounds like a boxing match with infinite rounds
Bombs continue to consume as the announcers of doom
Leading souls to their tomb, covering cities in grim gloom
When war has begun: daughters and sons carrying guns
No matter who won...mothers will grieve more than once
Streets filled with blood tracks to express the hard facts
Of many ruthless attacks where there's no time to relax
Bodies stacked in piles with overlooking hostile smiles
Death sentences without trials stuffed in nameless files
Not your country or wife but you are fighting for your life
With a mere rusty knife, you try to end this brutal strife
Mr. Bush, I've come to ask you about this devil's pact
Is your conscience still intact or do you put up an act?
How do you sleep at night with this sight on your mind?
How can you stay blind for the rights of our mankind?
Doesn't all the oil and blood get sticky on your hands?
When your commands continue to destroy other lands
You're the core of this war but simply choose to ignore
The fallen corps so next time: do your own dirty chore!




Left feedback to: Life Struggles - Doc Holiday

snipes 08-03-05 12:07 PM

goood drop i like
dese lines spoke out to me

When war has begun: daughters and sons carrying guns
No matter who won...mothers will grieve more than once
Streets filled with blood tracks to express the hard facts
Of many ruthless attacks where there's no time to relax
Bodies stacked in piles with overlooking hostile smiles

ovarall nice

Artik Phrost 08-03-05 01:46 PM

Imma give two feeds...One Deep...and One...Just Making Yu Look Lyke The Shit....lol

OMG, this was so fuckin RAW....yu are so iLL....please have my babies....lol

nawwww.....but i lyked this....imagery was real good....

keep writin ma....
*deeper feed back comin later*

DQ 08-05-05 10:22 AM

Both of you thanks for the feed y'all!

PhreeNapdizzle 08-05-05 01:29 PM

This was tight.. flow was overall pretty solid.. good word choice.. and you kept to the same topic throughout the whole verse.. Some shits kinda moving..

DQ 08-06-05 06:04 AM

^Thanks for the feed boy...

Doc Holiday 08-06-05 04:55 PM

Wut up Drama Queen? Yeah definatly a good verse. You was talking bout somethin that was so real. Ya joint was easy to understand, minus some big words, but the overall very easy to grasp. I didn't have to try to create a flow for ya joint, the shit was well written and well thought out. Keep doin ya thing shorty.

Doc Holiday


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