On RV I’m fighting mad with a writing pad carry heat
 

On RV I’m fighting mad with a writing pad carry heat
That’s very sweet a tech nines correct minds on streets
Cats be fake and wrong make up strong excuses and still
Get shot the threat is hot don’t play with pot and drugs kill
Dodge cops they come in large flocks with handcuffs
Stand tough make busts can’t trust folks plans scuffed
Have to be quick, slick and stable like a picnic table stand
Firm, all fags are whack like small bags of crack they can
Fuck you up so I duck the corrupt, need my open space
Like a broken vase my life’s shattered and scattered to disgrace
Got a great habit I take tablets stay high as days fly by like
Birds in the sky it seem my heart sway like part of a playwright
But don’t act well life’s facts are hell even at Wal-Mart it
All start mean with the green damn machines bark legit
“Insert cash” and that hurts your ass

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this was one of ur better drops..it flowed real well..i like the multis u used..and for a change i think this one actually made sense..i give it a 7

you used multies i seen you eleveated it was iight nothing so good but you elevetaing keep on and you'll get betetr for real.

wow thanks for the props yall miles ahead on attitude for real all rhymes microphone ready

good multis and flow and structure as u already no.....good attitude show ur \true gangsta lol.......7/10 keep progressin rtf on my om's

great multies first of all.. great structure... but its not good to end ya lines with an it unless its like " I couldnt handle it" or sumthing, cuz when read it seems really weird, but since this is also and audio track im guessing that works then. Keep writing man, I give it a 6/10 cuz the story was a lil boring and u ended it really bad, it needs to be longer, but flow and multi's were on point.

all righ tthanks for the props and critiques