veyetal vs Natural killa
 

Battle Rules:

8-Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

3-0 KO


Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-05-05 at 11:56 PM

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Win by 3-0 KO

veyetal has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-05-05 10:11 PM.

Natural killa has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-05-05 10:18 PM.

you name making as much sense,as seein Trinidad swing-some-slackness
and ur user title is incomplete,cause u the 'original' king-of-whackness*
he reppin an eagle pointlessly,shit,worse than all them mediation-fools
but u seemed to have lost ya wings,like someone robbed aviation-schools**
location's out n about,cause u constantly get kicked out,always be motoring
cause nobody ever ask(ax) for you,like some faggots to the deoderant
beat some newb,but after me you fall apart,like I did some-screw-pumping
and this ass join living legend in hopes of finnaly gettin a clue-to something**

READ HERE
*-user title says original
**-He has an eagle as a signature(just saying these incase he change them)
***-he joined living legend.....legend is an icon figure and also the key in maps used to help

understand both verses or don't vote....good luck veyetal :thumbup:

its not natural, but i'll monkey around with this killa
take the k out of his name, cause im about to gore-illa
like autumn leaves, he falls to the ground as soon as i shake'em
and im not talking about his sig.......when i'll easily rakim
your whack rhymes multiply every verse, you'll never have a single
cause once you drop, the shit don't stop...like rip offs of pringles
but this match is over, stab ya over and over, leave ya ripped
they say ask for a miracle and expect one...and ya just got whipped
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meh, fucking tired.

gorilla for the first line, 'rake him' for the second, yadda yadda, should get the rest

word, gl.

damn......no votes yet?...............damn lazy muther fuckers..

Voted For: veyetal

V/Vevetel

Multis-Both were really lacking multis bot up on that

Flow- Natural killa had better structure which made his flow tight

Personals-Vevetal had stronger personals Natural killa, personals were weak, needa up on those

Originality-Vevetal had more originality no hate killa, just stating my opinion.......RTF on my battles (Not in the sig they dont work) or else i will disqualify my vote

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

^^^I Lacked multis?....I LACKED MULTIS?!?!?!.....shut the fuck up...shit...you a d/r..way you making that guy's verse look godly.Plus you didn't explain it well...

sorry veyetal....i ain't losing a battle with votes like this...don't bother returning the favor veyetal...this vote gettin removed anyways..

i do not have dick riders.

and your multies were basic, mostly one word syllables...

thats not hard to do.

bump.

^^^the thing is.....you had no multis.............

^ did i say i had multies?

they don't win battles.

^^Ok....you said I had one sllyable multis(which there is no such thing as)

king of whackness/swing some slackness....4 syllables
mediation fools/aviation schools.....5 syllables
some screw pumping/clue to something.....4 syllables

SO you were wrong.And there is no such thing as one syllable multis.That's why it's called MULTI-syllable rhyming.

AND w/e....only reason I said that is because TAz said I was lacking in it...which just shows that he never read the verses.

ANyways...let's get some real votes up in here.

yes, but those are ineffective multies, they sound bad because of the wording....swing some slackness??? like wtf is that.

anyways, text battling is not about multies, there are people on here who think its cool to use multies alot, instead of good punches....but really, when you're writing a diss, you do it to humiliate the other person, not rhyme a whole bunch of times.

multies are a prime tool for audio, they add interest, and other shit as well, with text, you can be more creative, multies don't enhance text that well, unless you know how to use them properly and effectively.

what you are doing, is easy stuff, basic rhyming, just simple multies at the end of each line; you have no internals or anything, no other multies....so your 'mulites', at the end of your lines, dont really resemble multies, if you can understand this without coming at me with beef........

and using hyphens points them out, but are not needed.

word.

This was feedback posted for veyetal
 

EZ...............

Fuck trini .

Come at you with beef?....beef is offline homie...shit...you niggas take this net shit too seriously...

And...yes...battling is not ALL about multis.But the thing is...battling has many elements.Not just punches.Flow,punches,creativity,complexity...etc.B ased on what you said...could we just use dope wordplay and such with stretched lines?No...it's not like that.

Punches are the most important part.But combine them with multis...and you got something even better.Multis are used to enhance flow.And my shit is easy HuH?That what you saying?well....tell me this...is rhyming killa/gorilla...single/pringle easier than rhying swing some slackness/king of whackness...aviation schools/medication fools

Yeah..I didn't used any internals.....and I use multis at the end of my lines...but that's my style.Your style is that 50 cent basic rhyme scheme.Go look at the other verses around here and you'll see that your style is the same as the newbs.And I use hypens to point them out to help out newbs....but apperantley(taz)...some are too stupuid.

Shit....only on RV would one sllyable rhyming be accepted...go peep battles on RB,B-Boys,or RM...



^^Please tell me what this nigga is talking about?