RaDiKaL vs Law_Jr
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-07-05 at 12:15 AM

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RaDiKaL has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-06-05 11:54 PM.

Law_Jr has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-07-05 12:09 AM.

I got thunderous text dat make ya ~chest quiver~
and watch how I 'break law' like I ~'just littered'~
When RV mentioned da best textcees,you ~wasnt in da picture~
so dese rhymes are 'sonnin law'(son-in-law-) like I was da ~'husband of ya sister'~
Dawg you wack,keep thinkin ya not,I'll let ~da piece off at ya~
cause only people 'takin law serious' is ~'police officers'~

When you decided to challenge me you decided to meet your creator
This guys hardly hit puberty and already he's a master-bater

Who this nigga think he iz callin out people left and right
He keep switchin on niggas like a dick and pussy on a hermephadite

Let me end this battle cuz im sure this faggot gotta go 2 bed
The next you see you Dude will be on his Fuckin Deathbed

Aight...I couldnt really get creative wit dis one cause I only had 20 minutes.....but votes folks..

Heres how my verse should go...

Im da ~best nigga~ comin wit text dat make ya ~chest quiver~
You ~just bitter~ so watch how I 'BREAK LAW' like I ~'JUST LITTERED'~
When RV mentioned da best textcees,you ~wasnt in da picture~
so Im 'SONNIN LAW'(son-in-law) like 'I was da ~'HUSBAND OF YA SISTER'~
Im da ~chief bossin ya~ so dont make me let da ~piece off at ya~
cause da only people who 'TAKIN LAW SERIOUS' is ~'POLICE OFFICERS'~

dats how its supposed ta be...

its 2 late 2 say how it was "supposed" to be vote on tha battle ppl not on how it was supposed 2 be

This was feedback posted for RaDiKaL
 

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Voted For: RaDiKaL

I got thunderous text dat make ya ~chest quiver~
and watch how I 'break law' like I ~'just littered'~
^^Weak punch here..but ight..4/10..
When RV mentioned da best textcees,you ~wasnt in da picture~
so dese rhymes are 'sonnin law'(son-in-law-) like I was da ~'husband of ya sister'~
^^sonnin/son-in lines are played....1/10
Dawg you wack,keep thinkin ya not,I'll let ~da piece off at ya~
cause only people 'takin law serious' is ~'police officers'~
^^Ok...best bar but uncreativite still...4/10

Ok...get rid of these(~) things.Just makes the thing look newbish.Thart 1st bar wasn't that hard.2nd was played.3rd was ur best but still wasn't all that.And your wwhole verse was based upon that one concept on law/name.

When you decided to challenge me you decided to meet your creator
This guys hardly hit puberty and already he's a master-bater
^^Played as fuck...2/10
Who this nigga think he iz callin out people left and right
He keep switchin on niggas like a dick and pussy on a hermephadite
^^basic....1/10
Let me end this battle cuz im sure this faggot gotta go 2 bed
The next you see you Dude will be on his Fuckin Deathbed
^^NO punch....0/10

Ok....terrible verse right here.1st bar was played.Anything with puberty and masterbation has gotten played now.2nd was weak.3rd was not a punch.It was just you sayin how the boy will be dead.So next time...use better punches and more creative shit.

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RTF BELOW PLEASE
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203256

Well.....I was tryna think of somethin...but I really couldnt think of new shit in 10 mins...and I type slow,so I had ta just put whatever I can.....but thanx for da vote....more votes folks...

^^^return the favor please...but don't worry homie...ya got this battle wrappped....just step it up next time...but return the favor in link please....

Voted For: Law_Jr

this battle has to go to thatnigga...
i wasnt really feelin rad's verse. it had some self glorification and that shyt goes horrible in battles... thats kinda what lost the battle for you. tha second line was terrible... mainly becuase if u married his sister, u'd be his brother in law... it made the concept kinda dumb.
For ThatNigga, his best line was the second line. i thought it was kinda funny. nigga, u got some decent wordplay but u need to elevate. when u have punchlines in ur battle, try to make a set up in the first line of the bar and then make it connect to tha punch in tha second bar.
overall, law won this battle... for one reason bc rad's punches werent connectin but he also had better punches.

V/ ThatNigga(whoever that refers to)

this guy jus happens to come into all my threads, talkin shit on me then votes against me in a battle........but its aight..............blacklist......

Voted For: Law_Jr

rad ur opener was horrible litterong wow lol no bad openeer no personal
2nd no personals wack played
3rd same
work on ur vocab structure and most important personals and creativity your rhymes are mad weak elevate ur liiter line was ur abest line and it was wack elevate
that
1st line wack no personal and it was played
2nd wack played no personal
3rd wack watch glorifying ur self
ur hermaphidite bar was ur best line and it wasnt that good you need to work on personals and creativity you had no creative lines however u had better structure and ur played lines were better than his played lines
ur both wack and both need to elevate