New Life - Dedication To My Son & Girl
 

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Dedication to my Son & my Girl

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203814

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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2357245

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ohh i listened to this the other day... i used this beat a while back... still like it.

ite u kick in flow is prety decent. emotion is ite i spose. lyrics are nice story line is kool, like your first verse. aww mine didnt have this hook lol you'll have to send it me coz i wanna do another track but different story. second verse. better than your first you sou8nd more confident on this one. emotion is better. lyrics are dope i like the last line :D hook agen hook is dope lol..

overall real nice track man came straight from the heart nice track mate keep droppin em pz

beat is really played man sick of hearin it lol.... ur emotion is ok ur adlibs are off... u need to fix your quality and mix better.... flow is abit off and structure is also very basic.... lyrics are ok.... delivery isnt all dat cos ur emotion isnt too great it jus sounds like ur readin... u need a new mic cos it sounds fucked mate... 2nd flows better dan first.. emotion is a lil better still sounds like ur just readin n jus sayin wat u wanna say jus 4 da sake of sayin it.... yea advice id vgive u is... practice ur lyrics untill u know off top... den record fix ur structure... make it more consistent yet make more enjoyable switchin up ur rhyme scheme and flow every now n then and spit ur lyrics like u mean em... safe

beat is coo


watch the SSsssssssss


flow is ok


not bad


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thanks for the feed uppin

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