KillaMike vs Law_Jr
 

Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-14-05 at 03:56 PM

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Law_Jr has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-05 03:57 PM.

KiLLaMiKe has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-11-05 04:01 PM.

Dude wanna battle i'll give ima give it 2 ya right
cuz my rap flows iz like a hippie outta sight
you failed to realize your fukiin ass at battlin
especially that gay ass line "leave ya head rattlin"
musta been high when he battled me i kno it
ima end this with weak rhymes cuz i kno u aint shit

This Newb Accepted tha battle what the fuck was he thinkin
He Probably PMSin Cuz hiz Pussy Always Stinkin
Dudes so fukin poor couldnt afford computer see
So when he wants to battle he goes to the library
This is just practice, cmon its business man
you will always find this nigga wit a dick in his hand

the second one is what it shoulda been...................................

This dude gets no pussy he has NO Fukin Game
When girls turn lesbian he always takes the blame
He's no competion jus a chip of the 'ol block
this battle will be stuffed away like old gym socks
Im'ing me askin 2 battle, dudes pretty desperate
Dont ask him about pussy cuz dicks his favorite

how tha hell dude gon post 2 verses, that second one dont count yo

uppin.............................................

Voted For: Law_Jr

wow this was a weak battle

killamike - u had no punches, personals no nothing in your verse. your flow was ok and thats it. work on coming up with some kinda punches. theres tutorials and everything man take your time to read those


Law_Jr - your verse was almost as bad except tha fact that u had the gym socks line. thats the only reason you won. other than that you need to read those tutorials too. and desperate and favorite dont rhyme



very weak battle but Lw_Jr wins cause he had the only semi decent punch.

i wasnt tryna really come wit it cuz he i knew he was weak

i wasnt tryna really come wit it cuz he i knew he was weak

des-per-ate
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if you say it right they do rhyme

des-per-ate
fav-o-rite

if you say it right they do rhyme

Voted For: Law_Jr

This dude gets no pussy he has NO Fukin Game
When girls turn lesbian he always takes the blame
^Nice opener....5/10^
He's no competion jus a chip of the 'ol block
this battle will be stuffed away like old gym socks
^Nice comparison good diss fa sho 6/10^
Im'ing me askin 2 battle, dudes pretty desperate
Dont ask him about pussy cuz dicks his favorite
^extremely weak closer didnt even rhyme lol 0/10^

overall 5/10 ur rhymes need work, ur disses was iight fo the hole 6 lines u had....multis vocab was weak rhyme scheme wasnt that great...but better dan ur opponent

This Newb Accepted tha battle what the fuck was he thinkin
He Probably PMSin Cuz hiz Pussy Always Stinkin
^I dont think pussy's stink when u have pms...thats like yeast infection pal.....bad opener 3/10^
Dudes so fukin poor couldnt afford computer see
So when he wants to battle he goes to the library
^Ok diss not that hott....but iight 4/10^
This is just practice, cmon its business man
you will always find this nigga wit a dick in his hand
^better closer than ur opponent but not good enough 4/10^

over all 4/10 structure was not that great, make sure ur lines end up at the same point.....make sure ur disses actually dis sur opponent man.....

V/law_jr

please rtf since i took the time to analyze ur battle :thumbup:

^^good example of pre-written...how come u have 2 verses...saving them for the right time my friend?.........."lowers respect for killamike" :nono:

This was feedback posted for Law_Jr
 

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