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At The Club
At The Club
Utter sounds get butter by pounds girls clutter bounds With mini-skirts need plenty work sexually gossip mutter around Hate to force up a dress while on the course of progress to a bedroom My head groomed with dreads girl with breasts wears red perfume Tonight arrived on time now survive with wine this girl thighs Is fine booty ready cutie sweaty from dance and vibes From the DJ he play fat jams but there’s that complex wise Majority likes to exercise authority. ”hey dawg white T-shirts not Allowed in the club” “but I’m proud to be a thug” “well yippee stop Listen to my voice you have a choice the shirt or you take The girl in the skirt too” “dang shit strange that’s it I’ll Change” cub rules mug fools stuff could rearrange style “So boo I know you want me too let me put the facts down About your round backgrounds shaking like that so brown We’ll be the right match come together like a white patch So let me take you home your cake true and strong even hatch A baby my lady” MADD wait before you take the cake Don’t like mistakes you want desserts homegrown and baked That be under my skirt that thunder and perk like coffee mate? “Enough sex lets go” “My body wet like the Gulf of Mexico MADD even though I’m a lady sweaty and wet, I’m not ready For a baby yet” “dang girl you’re a fine dame what’s your name Betty?” |
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kinda short.....feelin the multis madd good flow man.....umm up on ya vocab fa sho...no doubt up on that.......good concept....keep elevatin7/10...1
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NiggaPlease don't really need vocab on a club drama anyway thanks for responding dawg
hey look twenty two lines is not a short verse at all |
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OK...I like this peice.Very different topic than what you'll ussually see around here.I was feelin the multis.Flow was stayed smooth for the most part of the verse.Structure was good.
Only problem was some of the content was..well..corny to say the least.Like that Gulf of Mexico one..c'mon.. But that's a problem that can easily be fixed. Overall-8/10 RTF Please http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=204095 |
Natural killa thanks for the props and critiques
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