Intermental - Aisha
 

I gathered that I need to add more emotion into my peices...so here it is..I think I did..so to add the emotion I wrote bout something that meant alot to me...

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its called Aisha

I will RTF

aww i fink dis beat is ill.... lol would be dope wit some songing in it.


your vocals are pretty loud, emotion aint dat good needs work,. u got potential though. lyrics are ite. hook is kool. delivery needs work aswell. like the hook.. no second verse? ite your talking,pretty decent track man, u need a better mic quality aint that good... u basically jus talk fr the rest of the verses. last verse was ite. need more emtoino tho and better mic presence. uva than that its ite. jus work on those fings pz

u cnt put this battle on your album because its copyrighted...also the original is a dope ass song that topped UK charts and you even it your using the same hook dude --------_________---------- , just no, this track was about an actual Aisha every1 knew...your other tracks were u were being original is much better....loose all the talking crap...get sum1 decent to mix your shit or get a betta mic..lyrically its decent, up your emotion, work on delivery and find your own style...and loose the fake US accent...damn i had my troubles with an american twang but ur jus tryin 2 sound 2 american...

^ i ve been extra hard on you cos i fuckin love da original :cussing:

Yo man Im american.........lol.....im gettin a UK accent...im from Chicago....and Im not puttin this exact song thinkin bout it...imma change it,

But im American

^oh my bad...i thought you was english....lol..my bad man :thumbup:

No problem lol.........

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u know what it think of this song, its dope man , u got potential for sure

Thanks that means alot to me man......

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lol I thought you was one of them UK guys lol get yo American accent back foo'

Lol...Im tryin hard lol...I been livin here for 2 years once you hear it you cant help but adapt it...its true lol

lol you see the kid who sang this on ebaums world....lmao

i just gotta say wow @ this, just becasue you used the beat ....haha

anyway you sound english, ya flow is shhakey work on makin it smooth and solid