Relationship till death.
 

Dark in sides from a weakean mind designs fraction.
Vision is deadly so blurry its got ya dizzy reasonably Fantasy's only a theory.
Only imagine if this never happened our passion together forever sound muffles and no ones laughing.
Fade to black irratate its "Flat" radiate the anxiety and still you refuse what Fond beauty you mean to me.
Now I understand what prophesy you aprehend pretend to be a homie Naw your just a throw away friend.
Relinquish significance and slowly watch it from development till wat remains is a death certificate,a grave, and a skelaton.

i really wanted to read it but the structure of it kinda sucks..its a little hard to read..so when you fix that then i'll read it

There you go man I fixed it. :thumbup:

Anyone read this yet? :huh:

stfu bitch why dont u go back to ur websites u invited ME to you fuckin idiot Do u even know who i really am its not lil Cali you fuckin idiot.;)

ight uppin this ppl. :thumbup:

anyone plz drop sum votes ight;) peace

aight its an aight piece not that good though try to work on ya vocab and emotions....u lacked it here ya kno man jus keep workin at that u got potential jus keep workin at it aight....man and ull elevate big time jus keep workin at it.....and also that structure too...the flow is off...aight so keep workin....

A link to what? :huh:

LMAO been here long enough to get nearly 3000 posts and still needs to ask what a link is.


A link to another open mic you have left decent feed on