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KhAoZ ThEoRy vs fraud
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6 lines only No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 08-22-05 at 12:06 PM Must drop verse in 25 minutes after check in. |
KhAoZ ThEoRy has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-22-05 11:26 AM.
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Dude, take notes from your sig, Its YOUR Rhymes that are a Fraud
Only time you in control of a win....is if you was workin a Scoreboard Dear lord....Please dont hate him cause he ugly, an bless him with skill... You could become a sucide bomber, an you still wont be ''built for the kill'' I'm at the top of the hill, your trynna Re-up from Rock Bottom... Too end herbs like you I flatline...........Or in other words, I DOT-EM.......................................... Dot-em ........... < flat line, get it? werd, drop vote , leave link ,favor returned, Yeah. |
fraud has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-22-05 11:51 AM.
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Fuck a 6, u get-a-four-fith n I spit-a-whole-clip… then ‘SHOVE-L’s(shovels) like wat u use to ‘dig-a-hole-with’…
I’m killin-him, this is a ‘crime’, but u already know that I sin-hard… so after this murder, R.V police i'll ‘put me in a CELL’ like ya ‘sim-card’… This is easy, nigga I retire-the-barriers… Who want it? I’m givin this kid his ‘NEXT-L’(Nextel) like the ‘WireLess-Carrier’! U'R DONE |
Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
Fuck a 6, u get-a-four-fith n I spit-a-whole-clip… then ‘SHOVE-L’s(shovels) like wat u use to ‘dig-a-hole-with’… 3...weak line, concept used before and where's the punch. I’m killin-him, this is a ‘crime’, but u already know that I sin-hard… so after this murder, R.V police i'll ‘put me in a CELL’ like ya ‘sim-card’… 4...more original with the concept, but the punch is lacking again. This is easy, nigga I retire-the-barriers… Who want it? I’m givin this kid his ‘NEXT-L’(Nextel) like the ‘WireLess-Carrier’! 4...this giving L's shit again, everybody has done it before and its gay. OVERALL: 11/30 Dude, take notes from your sig, Its YOUR Rhymes that are a Fraud Only time you in control of a win....is if you was workin a Scoreboard 6...decent concept, nice personal, gud punch. Dear lord....Please dont hate him cause he ugly, an bless him with skill... You could become a sucide bomber, an you still wont be ''built for the kill'' 6...LoL!! i like the 2nd line, decent wordplay and a nice punch, original to. I'm at the top of the hill, your trynna Re-up from Rock Bottom... Too end herbs like you I flatline...........Or in other words, I DOT-EM.......................................... 5...ok punch, but the flatline concept been used already. OVERALL: 17/30 khaoz took this easy, had a couple of original concepts and delivered decent punches ,the one bar at the end was a little played but still ok. fraud, ure new and you got ok wordplay, but you need to stop talking about handing out L's cuz that concept played out long ago. V/ - Khaoz Theory plz rtf on the battle link that is in my siggy :thumbup: |
Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
this battle was hard to vote on so i have to do it old school.............. IP: Fuck a 6, u get-a-four-fith n I spit-a-whole-clip… then ‘SHOVE-L’s(shovels) like wat u use to ‘dig-a-hole-with’… desent bar.... like the word play..... pretty good ..... 4/10 I’m killin-him, this is a ‘crime’, but u already know that I sin-hard… so after this murder, R.V police i'll ‘put me in a CELL’ like ya ‘sim-card’… ok...........not spectacular thought it could have been better 4/10 This is easy, nigga I retire-the-barriers… Who want it? I’m givin this kid his ‘NEXT-L’(Nextel) like the ‘WireLess-Carrier’! I like the word play good closer ...7/10..my fav. line Dude, take notes from your sig, Its YOUR Rhymes that are a Fraud like the personal and use of his name in this verse but kinda basic 4/10 Only time you in control of a win....is if you was workin a Scoreboard Dear lord....Please dont hate him cause he ugly, an bless him with skill... You could become a sucide bomber, an you still wont be ''built for the kill'' Like the structure...... hard hitting punches great word play 8/10 I'm at the top of the hill, your trynna Re-up from Rock Bottom... Too end herbs like you I flatline...........Or in other words, I DOT-EM.......................................... desnt could have been worded better but still a good closer 4/10 fraud ........... 15/30 KhAoZ ThEoRy ....16/30 like i said it was close............ i enjoyed this battle keep writing...both of you |
i dont have 200 post
and where is the punch? I’m killin-him, this is a ‘crime’, but u already know that I sin-hard… so after this murder, R.V police i'll ‘put me in a CELL’ like ya ‘sim-card’… do u not see the punch? the rest i've peep a few battles and people been saying stevie wounder line was flip well what is that about playa? i've seen weaker hits get more props but its ok thats probley ya friend on the low so sorry i even ask u to vote |
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king solo maybe this link will show u i dont just play off the same concept |
ok, you want a further breakdown i see..........
Fuck a 6, u get-a-four-fith n I spit-a-whole-clip… then ‘SHOVE-L’s(shovels) like wat u use to ‘dig-a-hole-with’… here the only thing that cud be mistaken as a punch is you saying you shove-L's which in itself is played to fuck, and saying you shove-L's is basically saying you just win, you are not hitting ure opponent with a punch, you are just making a statement that you make people lose. I’m killin-him, this is a ‘crime’, but u already know that I sin-hard… so after this murder, R.V police i'll ‘put me in a CELL’ like ya ‘sim-card’… this cud resemble a punch i guess, but basically your saying your gonna kill him, ure not hitting him with anything more than a statement, and the wordplay came in when you were talking a bout yourself again. This is easy, nigga I retire-the-barriers… Who want it? I’m givin this kid his ‘NEXT-L’(Nextel) like the ‘WireLess-Carrier’! again easily mistaken for a punch, when again all you are saying is that you are gonna give him his next-L, which overall is a played concept on RV and you've used the concept twice in this battle, just differently. its not a punch, you are again making a statement and not actually dissing your opponent. if you don't like how i vote then thats your choice, i wont vote on ure shit again if you can't handle a real vote that doesnt spare your feelings or anything, cuz that verse was wack....... |
^^^ i aint say i cant handle votes,
what im saying is what dont u get from my verse? hes verse is played as hell yet i came with word-play nextel(next-L) shovels (shove-L's) those are word-play the 2ed was a punch but u say it isnt well then i guess we have different opinion on what is a punch and as far as not voting on my battles again i could careless i just wanted to see what u thought and odviously u went for whats hes name and my verse WACK?? thats like saying ya record is based on newbies so if u wanna take it there we can as-well and set up a battle simple we dont gotta go back N fourth just settle it in 1 battle simple i aint come to beef with u but u acting like R.v GOD or somethign now getting outta place so if i was u i would set it up upp'in for more votes |
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Voted For: KhAoZ ThEoRy
Dude, take notes from your sig, Its YOUR Rhymes that are a Fraud Only time you in control of a win....is if you was workin a Scoreboard rofl good punch Dear lord....Please dont hate him cause he ugly, an bless him with skill... You could become a sucide bomber, an you still wont be ''built for the kill lol funny I'm at the top of the hill, your trynna Re-up from Rock Bottom... Too end herbs like you I flatline...........Or in other words, I DOT-EM.......................................... meh aight.................... good punches n good wordplaygood battle you seem to go off at the end tho -_-... Fuck a 6, u get-a-four-fith n I spit-a-whole-clip… then ‘SHOVE-L’s(shovels) like wat u use to ‘dig-a-hole-with’… meh...aight I’m killin-him, this is a ‘crime’, but u already know that I sin-hard… so after this murder, R.V police i'll ‘put me in a CELL’ like ya ‘sim-card’… good This is easy, nigga I retire-the-barriers… Who want it? I’m givin this kid his ‘NEXT-L’(Nextel) like the ‘WireLess-Carrier’! rofl...good ending erm this woz a close batlle i think kaoz took this tho just good battle tho |
This was feedback posted for fraud
Lol fraud u did pretty well....pollz...cant vote cos of crew
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