Suicidal Mind....need feed first audio
 

first finished audio........post feed -_-
left feed here:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2409021
and
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2409032

anyways here listen to it

uppin fo feed dont be too harsh first audio lol produced by intermental!

Iite i produced this but im gonna leave proppa feed:

You need to lower ure voice a lil homie...when i got this beat the compressor was in mad need...so try to keep on a same level or move the mic away from ure mouth...i like the lyrics...flow is mainly off because u recirded 10 seconds early but at least you knw now.....but its ok..6/10

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uppidy............................................ ........

How old are you? You sound young as hell


You can tell you was reading
you had no emotions
and you jumped on the beat way to early
and it thru off the timing for this whole track


you might want to count your syllables
cause dragging out some of the syllables aint gonna make the lyrics fit the beat

you forced a couple lines


raise your vocals and dont cuff the mic
meaning dont hold the mic by it's head
cause it sounds real muffled

outside of that I felt what you was trying to say

for your first audio you did better than most

actually write to the beat, dont use already written tracks
or memorize the lyrics you trying to use, it help you catch the beat

and pratice the song before you actually make the final cut



keep elevating


p.s. it might sound harsh, but there's no trace of hate in there
just giving you hints on how to make hot tracks



-Storm

thx......upping................................... ......

upping....................

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^^STOP UPPIN YOUR FUCKIN TRACK 3x in ONE DAY!! First and only warning on that shit man. uckin 20 mins apart, WTF is that shit...