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Mystic Chaos vs deranged
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15-30 lines TOPIC:HELL ON EARTH No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3-0tko 4-1tko ALL honest and explained votes will be returned :thumbup: Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 08-31-05 at 08:45 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Win by 3-0 KO... Reopened.. unexplained votes Closed by forfeit |
Deranged has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-31-05 08:16 PM.
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Mystic Chaos has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-31-05 08:29 PM.
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HELL ON EARTH
lookin out my window...unbearably..at that sickening nightmare flames imbursin the streets...the skies red..with an eerie light's glare took a step outside..lookin at the sky..seein strange figures soarin chains and thorns attached to bodies..wit their distinctive roarin cars were flipped upside down..and bodies were layin all around leavin me with a sense of fear...but I had to stay from the redound but somehow..everything happenin to me seemed intimate to me like i stood here before..or it's all been transmitted in dreams it was hell on earth...but wit the opposition unseen..it was odd WHERE were the defenders?..the celestial angels?......WHERE WAS GOD? WHY would he leave us here to die?..WHy would he just abandon us? Didn't he deserve all our trust?..all i see is darkness...no lust... all I believed in..all i put my heart n soul in..left us in affliction cuz the truth raised it's ugly head today..that it was all fiction but then..i saw..a strange...yet familar figure in the distance i knew who it was..lucifer..the devil trying to diminish our existance skin red from head to toe..with no clothes..& appearance in trandition a smile from ear to ear...due to his sense of accomplishing his mission i reached in my jean..a gat unvealed..and emptied bullets from wesson but no avail..he stood there....grinnin with his grimace expression i turned around..ran...but stopped when I saw wat was coming a huge inferno of flame..movin to me..wit no chance of me shunning it was like a tidal wave..stretching towards the heavens..arisingly a tear rolled down my cheeks..as i heard lucifer's laughter behind of me there was nothing left...it was over..armaggedon..i couldn;t save it hell's done taken over the world that I loved..and the world that i hated i shut my eyes..n felt the heat pass through..with the foul scent my life n the world itself...reaching a sadden n bitter denoument |
ite......my verse is done posted :thumbup: .................
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Closely with my peers wandering the streets at night
Suddenly an outburst exploding street the sky turns egg white Arising from below creatures of satan have spawned Running for their lives my peers were suddenly gone Watching in aw no further movements in my body These creatures arising from the ground were the opposite of godly Oddily watching hell take over the lonely streets of detroit Creatures hazing people, but im untouched i feel a sense of exploit Invinsibly froze standing in an odd pose as hell takes over Operation has been taken as an exorcism of god its now over Unfrozen in the instant as i take shelter to be un hurt Quickly swarmed with hells demons screaming with outburst Not believing the circumstances i am given a quick pinch to the skin As i begin to revolt for i will not stand to see hell win People start gathering surrounding me with help Being battered and beatin by these demons nothing but pain is felt Seeing this is going nowhere i retriet for safety on my LIFE Pondering about my future no distinctive plans to survive Looking up to see demons and the master demon in the flesh WithOut thinking I ask him whats the cause for this infest Answering with no thought well whats your sudden interest Fearing for my life no response in return as the demons lead the way Needing my soul for the extinction of god Thinking i will not live to see another day Why is god not helping if he is about to be put to rest Being irrational Satan lashes out, asking why i ask...no response at his request Ready for extinction as im raised above the contraption Hearing yelling in the backround but my mind is now lacking The screaming gets louder as i open my eyes to see this devias kon But opening my eyes not seeing the devil..but worse...its my mom! *explanation not as serious as it should be.....ending being its just a dream ran out of lines so thats why i have this :thumbup:* |
Closely with my peers wandering the streets at night Suddenly an outburst exploding street the sky turns egg white Arising from below creatures of satan have spawned Running for their lives my peers were suddenly gone Watching in aw no further movements in my body These creatures arising from the ground were the opposite of godly Oddily watching hell take over the lonely streets of detroit Creatures hazing people, but im untouched i feel a sense of exploit Invinsibly froze standing in an odd pose as hell takes over Operation has been taken as an exorcism of god its now over Unfrozen in the instant as i take shelter to be un hurt Quickly swarmed with hells demons screaming with outburst Not believing the circumstances i am given a quick pinch to the skin As i begin to revolt for i will not stand to see hell win People start gathering surrounding me with help Being battered and beatin by these demons nothing but pain is felt Seeing this is going nowhere i retriet for safety on my LIFE Pondering about my future no distinctive plans to survive Looking up to see demons and the master demon in the flesh WithOut thinking I ask him whats the cause for this infest Answering with no thought well whats your sudden interest Fearing for my life no response in return as the demons lead the way Needing my soul for the extinction of god Thinking i will not live to see another day Why is god not helping if he is about to be put to rest Being irrational Satan lashes out, asking why i ask...no response at his request Ready for extinction as im raised above the contraption Hearing yelling in the backround but my mind is now lacking The screaming gets louder as i open my eyes to see this devias kon But opening my eyes not seeing the devil..but worse...its my mom! *explanation not as serious as it should be.....ending being its just a dream ran out of lines so thats why i have this :thumbup:* |
please disregard the first one, i hit send to soon........upping for ur verse
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uppin............................................. ............
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no votes yet?....damn...RV and topicals...........
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uppin this to the fullest.........................
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Voted For: Deranged
i gotta go wit deranged on this one cuz it was deeper and i liked the vocab...mystic i like the last line i like that u put some humor in it but i still gotta go wit deranged...good job both of ya...holla at shya boy...peace Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Deranged
This was a very good battle you both came with good emotion and but the only thing is with Mystic verse and I aint his vocab the first bar wasn't really that good but with Deranged he stayed on topic had good vocab and structed this topical nicely Mystic you just need to elevate a little bit more in topicals and you'll have it but deranged gets my votes Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
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